dwgm: Kimi Birds (J/E - Between by notglassdoll)
dwgm ([personal profile] dwgm) wrote2005-04-03 04:19 pm

Request Ficlet for Teresa_C

And the last request ficlet I'm going to do, for now, is for [livejournal.com profile] teresa_c, who wanted...



~ Point of View ~


Jack took another deep swig of rum, wiped his mouth and looked at his fair companion, seated next to him on the sand. Coltish, beautiful, petulant. He’d lay he could wipe that frown away, though, given half a chance. Not that he’d be given it, of course, unless the drink took her out of herself. And if it did, would he take the chance? He thought about it, thought about slipping an arm ‘round those slender shoulders, thought about placing a kiss on lips that were slightly parted in adorable confusion, thought about touching…

“What are you looking at?” she demanded, suddenly, having noticed his perusal.

“You, of course,” he replied, easily. He took another swig, then looked again, sidelong.

“Well, don’t! It isn’t polite.”

He chuckled. “Polite! Just who is it you think you’re marooned with, here, Miss Swann?”

“Captain Jack Sparrow!” she snapped. “Or so you say.”

He scowled a bit at the note of doubt. “The one in that bloody pamphlet I suppose.”

“Do not use profanity. You told me there was truth in those stories.”

“There is. Some of it.” He took another drink, and then noticed she was looking him over, with obvious disapproval. “What?”

“You don’t look like him at all!”

“Like who?”

“There was an illustration.”

Jack stared, and then growled, “I don’t bloody care if there was a bloody marble statue! If it don’t look like me, it’s artist’s fault, not mine!” There was amusement in her eyes, and he narrowed his and took another swig of rum.

“Did you really steal the Interceptor? With James right there?”

“James?”

“Capt—Commodore Norrington.”

“Oh. Did Will tell you that?”

“Yes. Among other things.”

“Well, I didn’t.”

She frowned. “You didn’t?”

He shook his head. “No. Commandeered it. Nautical term.” As understanding dawned on her face, he added, “It’s all in how you look at it. Savvy?”

A slow smile touched her lips. “Oh, yes. I savvy.” She lifted her bottle. “Cheers, Captain Sparrow.”

“Cheers, Miss Swann,” he returned, his bottle not so much clinking as caressing hers.



~.~

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[identity profile] the-dala.livejournal.com 2005-04-03 04:58 pm (UTC)(link)
Heeeeeee!
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[identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com 2005-04-03 05:16 pm (UTC)(link)
;)

Congrats on the acquisition of a toothbrush, btw!

[identity profile] scribbling-elf.livejournal.com 2005-04-03 05:51 pm (UTC)(link)
*grins* Happy. That is all.
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[identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com 2005-04-03 07:21 pm (UTC)(link)
Happy to have inspired a *grin*!
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[identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com 2005-04-03 07:22 pm (UTC)(link)
So happy you enjoyed it. ;)

And well worth the wait!

[identity profile] teresa-c.livejournal.com 2005-04-03 06:33 pm (UTC)(link)
Perfect. Thank you. I didn't want to limit you by specifying "on the island" but that is the scene I've always thought had so much potential. Thanks again!
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Re: And well worth the wait!

[identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com 2005-04-03 07:20 pm (UTC)(link)
You're very welcome. I'm so happy you enjoyed it!

Yes, I agree that "deleted scenes" from The Island have a lot of potential, as far as fanfiction goes. It's fun to just start something and see what happens with the characters, which is what I did here, of course.

[identity profile] alwyshrt1uluv.livejournal.com 2005-04-03 09:10 pm (UTC)(link)
Love the last two lines, and this whole little ficlet. Nice little J/E pick-me-up.
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[identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com 2005-04-03 09:17 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks so much for the feedback--I was wondering a little about the last two lines particularly. But I figure they can't have been sniping at each other the whole time--they seemed to be having quite a lot of fun around that bonfire. ;)

Glad you enjoyed this.

[identity profile] tiggothy.livejournal.com 2005-04-03 11:11 pm (UTC)(link)
Oooh, I like the bottles caressing each other :-) It's just all lovely, and so much in so little space.

Thanks for sharing :-)
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[identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com 2005-04-03 11:13 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks so much for reading! Glad you liked it.

[identity profile] hendercats.livejournal.com 2005-04-04 06:23 am (UTC)(link)
“I don't bloody care if there was a bloody marble statue!
Wheee! Fits of giggles are an excellent Monday-morning pastime. I love when you write J/E!
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[identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com 2005-04-04 06:27 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you! So happy to have provided a bit of cheer on a Monday. ;)

[identity profile] berne.livejournal.com 2005-04-04 01:26 pm (UTC)(link)
Coltish, beautiful, petulant. -- Perfect choice of words, that.

Jack stared, and then growled, “I don’t bloody care if there was a bloody marble statue! If it don’t look like me, it’s artist’s fault, not mine!” There was amusement in her eyes, and he narrowed his and took another swig of rum. -- <333 It made me laugh and I can so easily envision this as a deleted scene. I do so love J/E bickering written like this.

[identity profile] hereswith.livejournal.com 2005-04-04 01:49 pm (UTC)(link)
*long happy and contented sigh*

There are bottles caressing and a mention of "commandeered" and "nautical term" and I love Elizabeth's: "There was an illustration." That simple sentence just says so much. Wonderful and this goes straight to my memories!