dwgm: Kimi Birds (J/E - At World's End)
dwgm ([personal profile] dwgm) wrote2011-07-18 05:10 pm

Drabble: 'Homecoming' (J/E - PG)

175 words for the current drabble challenge...



~ Homecoming ~


“And what the devil’s this?” Jack demanded, his purr turning to a growl as he grasped a lock of Elizabeth’s tangled hair and closely examined the colorful bead that was tied into it, a favorite bauble that he thought he’d lost. He scowled, and noted her guilty flush. “So that’s where it went!”

“You have so many, I didn’t think you’d notice,” Elizabeth said, defensively. She squirmed a bit and shoved at his chest, for he’d had her pinned against a convenient bulkhead to greet and was now exerting considerably more force since he’d caught her in mischief. “Jack, stop it!”

“Won’t,” he asserted. “Why’d you take it?”

She stilled, glaring. The words were dragged from her: “I... I didn’t know when you’d be back.”

His brows rose and he smiled a slow smile. “Ah! A keepsake, then. You knew you’d miss old Jack.”

“Insufferable,” she muttered.

“Maybe. But what’re you, eh? Pilfering, pouting, pretty... Pirate!“ Same word, same tone, and she looked as startled, as he’d meant her to, before he kissed her.


~.~

[identity profile] pearlseed.livejournal.com 2011-07-19 01:01 am (UTC)(link)
Absolutely too very cool! He would be grumpy if his stuff started to meander, although I can so imagine him being all chuffed up that she'd admit to missing him. Yeah, he'd like that very much. But for his kisses, a little manhandling might not be such a dreadful awful thing.
This is a tasty treat, got them nice cadence to it, flows well from one part to the next, yeah.

[identity profile] just-a-dram.livejournal.com 2011-07-19 01:20 am (UTC)(link)
Jack's variable reactions in this are just perfect!

[identity profile] sharklady35.livejournal.com 2011-07-19 02:08 am (UTC)(link)
Aye, Jack probably doesn't like having anyone get light-fingered about his precious keepsakes. But he's got the ego to appreciate the motive.

[identity profile] whensheflies.livejournal.com 2011-07-19 06:32 am (UTC)(link)
Eee! This was adorable. I love the idea of Elizabeth pilfering a bit of Jack's baubles for her own hair. Peas in a pod, those two.

[identity profile] hendercats.livejournal.com 2011-07-19 11:18 am (UTC)(link)
Perfect, perfect, perfect!!

This:
“Won’t,” he asserted.
is to love. And you follow it immediately with an echo (*bounces*) - I've always adored echos in fic! And I very much like the thought of this being on his return after OST.

[identity profile] aletheiafelinea.livejournal.com 2011-07-19 10:17 pm (UTC)(link)
Ah-ah! Pilfering, pouting, pretty... fast learner! And trust her to know which one to nick... He lost a bauble and nicked the heart, and who's a pirate here, eh? ;)

Nice work!

[identity profile] florencia7.livejournal.com 2011-07-20 07:00 pm (UTC)(link)
How such a short scene can be THAT intense?? That was AMAZING. I loved it.

[identity profile] hereswith.livejournal.com 2011-07-20 09:48 pm (UTC)(link)
Loved that she took one of his beads, a favourite, no less, and why. And the dialogue between them here is great. Of course she wouldn't want to admit that she's missed him and of course he'd be insufferable, knowing ;-)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Just a Kiss - by the Nixonator)

[identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com 2011-08-01 02:41 am (UTC)(link)
I'm so happy you enjoyed this one. Thank you so much for commenting!
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Just a Kiss - by the Nixonator)

[identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com 2011-08-01 02:42 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you, and forgive me for not replying right away, I truly appreciate you reading and commenting.
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Just a Kiss - by the Nixonator)

[identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com 2011-08-01 02:44 am (UTC)(link)
he's got the ego to appreciate the motive.

He certainly does, and the method, too. Thank you so much for reading and commenting!
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Just a Kiss - by the Nixonator)

[identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com 2011-08-01 02:45 am (UTC)(link)
Peas in a pod, indeed. Thank you so much for reading and commenting!
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Just a Kiss - by the Nixonator)

[identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com 2011-08-01 02:48 am (UTC)(link)
I very much like the thought of this being on his return after OST.

I like that idea, too! But... what about that voodoo doll? eeep!

Thank you very much for reading and commenting, and my apologies for being so late in my reply.
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Just a Kiss - by the Nixonator)

[identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com 2011-08-01 02:49 am (UTC)(link)
Pirates both, and I'm glad to know you enjoyed this. Thank you so much for reading and commenting!!
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Just a Kiss - by the Nixonator)

[identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com 2011-08-01 02:51 am (UTC)(link)
Very happy you enjoyed the intensity, and thank you very much for reading and commenting!!
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Just a Kiss - by the Nixonator)

[identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com 2011-08-01 02:52 am (UTC)(link)
Insufferable, and yet...! I'm so glad you enjoyed this! Thank you very much for commenting, I truly appreciate it.

[identity profile] lady-di75.livejournal.com 2011-08-03 02:48 pm (UTC)(link)
Ha!!! Love this!! Just like a man, just like Jack, for his inflated ego to make everything alright... Flawless dialogue. Love!

[identity profile] tndixie.livejournal.com 2011-08-20 03:45 pm (UTC)(link)
So when did Lizze steal said bead "what an interesting story" special since Jack did not notice it was gone!