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175 words for the current drabble challenge...



~ Homecoming ~


“And what the devil’s this?” Jack demanded, his purr turning to a growl as he grasped a lock of Elizabeth’s tangled hair and closely examined the colorful bead that was tied into it, a favorite bauble that he thought he’d lost. He scowled, and noted her guilty flush. “So that’s where it went!”

“You have so many, I didn’t think you’d notice,” Elizabeth said, defensively. She squirmed a bit and shoved at his chest, for he’d had her pinned against a convenient bulkhead to greet and was now exerting considerably more force since he’d caught her in mischief. “Jack, stop it!”

“Won’t,” he asserted. “Why’d you take it?”

She stilled, glaring. The words were dragged from her: “I... I didn’t know when you’d be back.”

His brows rose and he smiled a slow smile. “Ah! A keepsake, then. You knew you’d miss old Jack.”

“Insufferable,” she muttered.

“Maybe. But what’re you, eh? Pilfering, pouting, pretty... Pirate!“ Same word, same tone, and she looked as startled, as he’d meant her to, before he kissed her.


~.~

Date: 2011-07-19 01:01 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pearlseed.livejournal.com
Absolutely too very cool! He would be grumpy if his stuff started to meander, although I can so imagine him being all chuffed up that she'd admit to missing him. Yeah, he'd like that very much. But for his kisses, a little manhandling might not be such a dreadful awful thing.
This is a tasty treat, got them nice cadence to it, flows well from one part to the next, yeah.

Date: 2011-08-01 02:41 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Just a Kiss - by the Nixonator)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
I'm so happy you enjoyed this one. Thank you so much for commenting!

Date: 2011-07-19 01:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] just-a-dram.livejournal.com
Jack's variable reactions in this are just perfect!

Date: 2011-08-01 02:42 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Just a Kiss - by the Nixonator)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you, and forgive me for not replying right away, I truly appreciate you reading and commenting.

Date: 2011-07-19 02:08 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sharklady35.livejournal.com
Aye, Jack probably doesn't like having anyone get light-fingered about his precious keepsakes. But he's got the ego to appreciate the motive.

Date: 2011-08-01 02:44 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Just a Kiss - by the Nixonator)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
he's got the ego to appreciate the motive.

He certainly does, and the method, too. Thank you so much for reading and commenting!

Date: 2011-07-19 06:32 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] whensheflies.livejournal.com
Eee! This was adorable. I love the idea of Elizabeth pilfering a bit of Jack's baubles for her own hair. Peas in a pod, those two.

Date: 2011-08-01 02:45 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Just a Kiss - by the Nixonator)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Peas in a pod, indeed. Thank you so much for reading and commenting!

Date: 2011-07-19 11:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hendercats.livejournal.com
Perfect, perfect, perfect!!

This:
“Won’t,” he asserted.
is to love. And you follow it immediately with an echo (*bounces*) - I've always adored echos in fic! And I very much like the thought of this being on his return after OST.

Date: 2011-08-01 02:48 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Just a Kiss - by the Nixonator)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
I very much like the thought of this being on his return after OST.

I like that idea, too! But... what about that voodoo doll? eeep!

Thank you very much for reading and commenting, and my apologies for being so late in my reply.

Date: 2011-07-19 10:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aletheiafelinea.livejournal.com
Ah-ah! Pilfering, pouting, pretty... fast learner! And trust her to know which one to nick... He lost a bauble and nicked the heart, and who's a pirate here, eh? ;)

Nice work!

Date: 2011-08-01 02:49 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Just a Kiss - by the Nixonator)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Pirates both, and I'm glad to know you enjoyed this. Thank you so much for reading and commenting!!

Date: 2011-07-20 07:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] florencia7.livejournal.com
How such a short scene can be THAT intense?? That was AMAZING. I loved it.

Date: 2011-08-01 02:51 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Just a Kiss - by the Nixonator)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Very happy you enjoyed the intensity, and thank you very much for reading and commenting!!

Date: 2011-07-20 09:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hereswith.livejournal.com
Loved that she took one of his beads, a favourite, no less, and why. And the dialogue between them here is great. Of course she wouldn't want to admit that she's missed him and of course he'd be insufferable, knowing ;-)

Date: 2011-08-01 02:52 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Just a Kiss - by the Nixonator)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Insufferable, and yet...! I'm so glad you enjoyed this! Thank you very much for commenting, I truly appreciate it.

Date: 2011-08-03 02:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lady-di75.livejournal.com
Ha!!! Love this!! Just like a man, just like Jack, for his inflated ego to make everything alright... Flawless dialogue. Love!

Date: 2011-08-20 03:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tndixie.livejournal.com
So when did Lizze steal said bead "what an interesting story" special since Jack did not notice it was gone!

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