Drabbling again...

[dwgm]

For potc100 challenge #2...



~ Scuppered ~

"Ship ahoy!"

"Where away?" Jack rifled the pocket of his justacorps for his glass.

"Off the starboard bow, Captain," shouted Gibbs.

Jack strode swiftly to his First's side and raised the spyglass, looking narrowly at the distant vessel. "She's English."

Gibbs' face fell. "Blast. We could've used a spot of profit -- and fresh vittles, and rum."

"Let’s change course. We should be on her within the hour."

"We're goin' after an English ship?"

"Aye." Jack stowed his glass. "Wouldn't count on the swag, though. Someone's been before us."

"She's adrift?"

"Sinking, actually. Scurry along, eh? Sharks're fat enough 'round here."


~.~

Comments

[sinningia.livejournal.com]

Weee, I like it. I like it very much! Nice nautical language, nice characterization and nice little plot. ;-)

~sinningia~

[choose2live.livejournal.com]

This actually drew an 'aww' from me... 'cause as much as I love Jack the Antihero, I love his occasional temptation towards heroism, too. :-)

[outinthestorm.livejournal.com]

Yay for Jack the hero!

[erinya.livejournal.com]

I like how he feels compelled to do the right thing but acts as though it's nothing out of the ordinary. A lot said in a few words, between the fact that Jack normally doesn't prey on English ships and "Sharks're fat enough 'round here." Very well done.

[martian-aries.livejournal.com]

Love the nautical terms. Also love Gibbs. And heroic Jack. This piece is quite sweet, in its piratey way. Kudos!

[jackfan2.livejournal.com]

Very nicely done! The nautical verbiage, the hero-Jack, the brevity of it; all wonderfully done.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you! So happy you liked it. :)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

One of those inconvenient opportune moments. *G* Glad you liked this.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Yay, indeed! Sometimes those "opportune moments" are thrust upon one. So happy you enjoyed!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

If he's going to play the hero he's certainly not going to advertise the fact. So unpiratical, you know.

So happy you enjoyed this. :D

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

sweet, in its piratey way

Just like Jack (only saying so -- or even implying it -- would put him in a very bad mood, inspiring all sorts of mischief).

Glad you enjoyed this!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thanks, Julie! Had to cut it down, considerably -- it started out at 137 words -- but I did it, and I'm very happy you thought it retained enough story and atmosphere.

[yoiebear.livejournal.com]

How many more of these drabbles do you have in you? They are great!

[hendercats.livejournal.com]

(I didn't comment?? Really thought I had, this morning. *bashes head*)

Excellent Jack-voice throughout! Believe what I like best is his matter-of-factness - checking for those in need of rescue should be done; they'll do it. And as others have said, the sharks line is a delight.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I like drabbles, both writing and reading them, and those little tiny plot bunnies are certainly prolific. So happy you liked this. :)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much for coming back to comment. I am not as good as I should be in that regard -- I am woefully behind at the Impverse, for example -- and it's so superb, too.

Very glad you enjoyed this one!

[hereswith.livejournal.com]

I love your drabbles, you're so good at saying so much with so few words, and this is no exception. One of those moments that he doesn't simply wave at as it passes by :-) I especially liked his matter-of-factness, just as hendercats mentioned. Wonderful, my dear!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

One of those moments that he doesn't simply wave at as it passes by

I think when it comes down to brass tacks he will play the hero, however reluctantly.

I'm very happy you enjoyed this! Thank you.

[honorat.livejournal.com]

Wonderful as always. Love Gibbs looking out for the rum and Jack off on another rescue mission. One wonders if this one will be as tangled as some of his others. This does have the feel of the beginning of a plot. I love the last line.

I always write Jack attacking English ships for some reason--witness "The Great Kidnap Caper". I guess it's because nationalism is a form of exclusion that makes no sense to me. People are people. If it's okay for Jack to rob the French or the Chinese, it's okay for him to rob the Brits. But I imagine in a universe where Jack is running under letters of marque, his avoiding English shipping works.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thanks so much for reading and commenting. Glad you enjoyed it. Re: the English ship question -- hopefully that will be explained as I write more on this. Yes, there will be some complications involved -- amusing ones, I hope. :D

[honorat.livejournal.com]

Oooh. *drools over hints at more story*