Drabble: 'Sailing East'

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125 Words for the "East" drabble challenge at blackpearlsails



~ Sailing East ~

From infancy, Elizabeth had longed to sail away and see the wonders of the east, extolled to her by returning friends and relatives. What an irony that the opportunity had come to her at last, in such a way.

She had never been an early riser, but she took the morning watch, all through the months of their long voyage to Singapore. There was some sort of perverse satisfaction in getting up in the dark, tired and cold, and setting to work in that harsh sea-bound world. But then, when dawn approached and the stars began to fade, there was always a moment of hope, clear and sharp as black ink, a small bird flitting above the waves in the face of the rising sun.


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Comments

[this-weirdness.livejournal.com]

Lovely. :)

[the-dala.livejournal.com]

What a nice little moment!

You know, I've hardly seen any fics in which Elizabeth returns to her new seat in Singapore...

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you! (And you're so quick, too!)

[cmgacrux.livejournal.com]

Beautiful work, love.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thanks -- and you're right. Another, very different voyage, that would be. :)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[p0wdermonkey.livejournal.com]

Lovely moment. :)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[cbtreks.livejournal.com]

That's very nice! Thanks for posting it.

[mary684.livejournal.com]

what a quiet and very sweet moment you've given us, lovely.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

So happy you liked it! Thanks for letting me know.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[bombazzinedoll.livejournal.com]

How very Lizzie. And I think I love your snippets best: you're always able to capture so much in so few words.

[ladymouse2.livejournal.com]

Awww. I can see her taking the watch as a kind of penance, feeling the irony of finally having her wish--but in the way she'd ever have dreamed or wished it and then to see a sparrow far out to sea the very image of Jack's tattoo... Very Sweet.

[equilibrium44.livejournal.com]

'there was always a moment of hope'

That does reflect what seemed to be her focus throughout that trip to the Locker.

[djarum99.livejournal.com]

Wonderful drabble - I love the imagery of hope at the end ♥

[kseenaa.livejournal.com]

That was absolutly lovely... So very sweet. A quite moment. But a beautiful one. :-)

[sharklady35.livejournal.com]

Ooo, lovely imagery! Not many writers do it as well.

[florencia7.livejournal.com]

I loved the ending: But then, when dawn approached and the stars began to fade, there was always a moment of hope, clear and sharp as black ink, a small bird flitting above the waves in the face of the rising sun. Amazing!!

Beautiful drabble.

[hendercats.livejournal.com]

there was always a moment of hope, clear and sharp as black ink, a small bird flitting above the waves in the face of the rising sun
A touch of hope and peace each day - certainly that's exactly what she needed. Lovely.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I do love writing drabbles. :))

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

It's a metaphoric sparrow, but very real nonetheless. I'm so glad you liked this! Thank you for letting me know!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

I think so, too.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much!

[hereswith.livejournal.com]

Everyone has already quoted my favourite bit, but my dear, that last line is fantastic and I adore it. Reading this, I can see Elizabeth there, in front of me, her dreams coming true but not in any way she could have imagined. It's a beautifully captured "missing scene" :-)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you -- I'm so very glad you liked it. I trust your judgment about Elizabeth above anyone's!