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What a delightfully rainy day we've been having. True to form, I've been slacking again, sitting about writing Pirate!fic: the next chapter of Harry IV, a Secret Santa story, and the following, for the current [livejournal.com profile] pirates500 challenge: Individuality



Best Intentions



He’d never been ordinary, never really fit in. His mother had been of ancient lineage, but a profligate’s by-blow was neither gentry nor commoner, though he’d seemed something of both to most as he grew from boy to young man. Still, eventually, he chose the low road, and soon found he must play the part or risk failure at the very least; at worst, an early death. It was that important, and it was that simple.

The facial hair had grown in slowly, the moustache nicely luxuriant, the curling beard along his jawline less so. It was years before the braids and beads at his chin were possible, but he loved the look when he'd finally achieved them: truly piratical.

By then, of course, his hair was already a work of art, though ever a work-in-progress. Long, then longer, and dark as night, with plaits and mats, beads, bangles, and bones, all held back with his red scarf, once bright, eventually fading from sun, sea, and sweat. The tricorn that topped all was a unique creation, waterproofed leather, presented to him by his darling Molly that first time he’d come to visit her in her new shop, the shop he’d paid for, six months of swag turned to gold to give her that freedom. He’d never regretted it, not for a minute. And he’d never part with his hat.

The big bucket boots were not really ideal for life on a ship, but what did that matter when they so obviously shouted “Buccaneer!”

The rest of his clothing echoed the sentiment, the finest togs he could claim from their prizes. He liked garments that swayed and moved: white lawn or linen shirts with absurdly billowing sleeves, often open to the cooling breeze and, coincidentally, to reveal a bit of smoothly muscled, bronzed chest; the most elaborately embroidered waistcoats he could lay hands on; frock coats in rich colors, and big enough to mask the wide assortment of weaponry he carried, tools of his trade. His trews, however, were often just a little snug, though still permitting of quick ascent of ratlines, and the acrobatics of energetic swordplay.

And over time, his very skin shouted of adventure, both good and ill. Tattoos, swirling, and picturesque, and a varying selection of gold rings piercing his ears (and other, less visible spots), gave testament to nights of drunken bravado (and sheer stupidity in some instances); scars of all kinds told their tales of violence: fierce fighting, and punishment, and the power of a body to heal and endure. Every one of the marks bought with pain, an assurance that he still lived. And that was what mattered, didn’t it?

That, and the image he’d created. Kohl ‘round the eyes, an odd affectation, and almost a summary of his persona: comical, dandified, lackadaisical, and elegant; devil-may-care; a fribble. Put ‘em off their guard, made ‘em careless.

And set him like stone in their memories, which had, of course, been his intention all along.




~.~

Date: 2004-12-05 04:04 pm (UTC)

Date: 2004-12-05 04:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] captain-molly.livejournal.com
Oooooh! I like that a lot! (And the fact that the girl has my name is exciting as well!)
Pretty imagery, great vocabulary; in short: awesome job.

Date: 2004-12-05 04:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hereswith.livejournal.com
Absolutely wonderful description of Jack :-) And the last line, oh, that made me shiver...

Date: 2004-12-05 04:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] doolabug.livejournal.com
Positively exquisite. Of course Jack would have piercings in, ah, various locations. I believe a bit of fanon has just been born. Bravo!!

Date: 2004-12-05 04:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shazzathegreat.livejournal.com
Oh, this is great! I'm a sucker for Jack-and-his-clothing pieces, and this is the best one I've read so far.

Date: 2004-12-05 04:25 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack (blank by  unen2gemismasin))
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thanks! Molly is an OC of mine from a drabble, and a story I wrote a while back. Someone actually emailed me this week to tell me she really enjoyed reading about Molly and did I have any other stories that included her, so I thought I'd add her here, just for the fun of it.

So glad you enjoyed the ficlet!

Date: 2004-12-05 04:29 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack (blank by  unen2gemismasin))
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
And the last line, oh, that made me shiver...

I didn't think about that when I wrote it, but I think Jack's whole thing is being several steps ahead of everyone, whenever possible, and his appearance is calculated to convey exactly the impression he wants to give.

Glad you liked it!!

Date: 2004-12-05 04:35 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack (blank by  unen2gemismasin))
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Oh, thank you--glad you liked it! But I have to admit that the 'piercings in various locations' was lifted from [livejournal.com profile] tessabeth in this chapter of her story, Trochal. Read it, if you have time--it is to die for!

Date: 2004-12-05 04:39 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack (blank by  unen2gemismasin))
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
I usually don't write a lot of Jack Description, since we've all seen the movie a zillion times, but then I was reading [livejournal.com profile] tessabeth's latest over at [livejournal.com profile] impofperversity and the part I really went for was a portrait of Jack seen through the eyes of someone who is a stranger to him. Jack is such a great character in so many ways. I'm very happy you liked this little piece. :)

Date: 2004-12-05 04:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] qinfinity.livejournal.com
Heh, wonderful! I love the last line. Oh so Jack.

Date: 2004-12-05 04:43 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack (blank by  unen2gemismasin))
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Yes, he's quite calculating, trying to stay ahead of the game. Thanks so much--I'm glad you liked it!

Date: 2004-12-05 07:18 pm (UTC)
ext_7904: (POTC-jack-dance)
From: [identity profile] porridgebird.livejournal.com
I like this a lot :)) All the little details, and the how and the why. And the piercings, yes indeed. Good job!

Hey how'd you get rain and we didn't? Not fair!

Date: 2004-12-05 07:40 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack (blank by  unen2gemismasin))
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
You didn't get rain? [livejournal.com profile] fnordelissa said it was raining in Santa Barbara this morning. Not sure how it could've missed you. We got quite a bit here--the hills are getting green as Ireland!

Glad you liked the fic. You been reading over at [livejournal.com profile] impofperversity? They've got a new fic going, co-authoring it. Quite lovely. ;)

Date: 2004-12-05 08:17 pm (UTC)
ext_7904: (POTC-jack-dance)
From: [identity profile] porridgebird.livejournal.com
Ooooh I know, and I've been putting it off because I KNOW (and YOU know what I mean) that as soon as I start, it's gonna suck me in. The thought of those two co-authoring, as brilliant as they each are, whoa, this could be dangerous. Or illegal. Or something. But arrgh, screw it, I can resist no longer. I'm there.

Rain: Maybe we got it last night & I slept thru it. Bummer! But isn't the Green wonderful? I absolutely love it. OK enough chit chat... I have a fic to read...

Date: 2004-12-05 08:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] guanin.livejournal.com
I really like this. Lovely description.

Date: 2004-12-05 09:01 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack (blank by  unen2gemismasin))
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thanks. It was fun to do, too.

Date: 2004-12-05 10:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] doublu.livejournal.com
Very very nice. The description very much captured how Jack's appearance may seem uncouth at first but in fact is given thought and purpose just like his manners seem pointless but are in fact designed to make others underestimate him so he can be one step ahead. (like you pointed out several times) =]
And out of curiosity how likely do you think it is for Jack to be pierced in his --ahem private parts? just wonderin...

Date: 2004-12-05 10:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] doublu.livejournal.com
I just noticed.. what about his gold capped teeth? Or did I miss it somewhere?

Date: 2004-12-05 11:22 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack (blank by  unen2gemismasin))
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
And out of curiosity how likely do you think it is for Jack to be pierced in his --ahem private parts? just wonderin...

LOL! Well, I left this to the imagination purposely, but I was thinking of the nipple-piercing that is referred to in my story, The Parrot and the Pearl.

Thank you for commenting--I'm glad you enjoyed the ficlet!

Date: 2004-12-05 11:24 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Sparrow by ashleygaea)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
No! I forgot about the teeth, until after I was through--I would have had to go back and redo the whole thing to include it in the 500 words. If it hadn't been a [livejournal.com profile] pirates500 thing I would have added them.

Date: 2004-12-06 01:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/_beetle_/
I just straggled over on a rec, of sorts. I lurve this piece. The characterization is wonderful, deft and not heavy-handed and the last line is a work of art.

*sweeps you a grand bow*

Date: 2004-12-06 01:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tseek-unique.livejournal.com
What a lovely painting of Jack: his scars, clothing, jewelry,weapons and tatoos-- everything that is pure pirate and pure essence of Jack. May he climb in all our windows tonight!!

Date: 2004-12-06 05:30 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack (blank by  unen2gemismasin))
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
*blushes*

I'm very happy you enjoyed it so much! Thank you for letting me know. :)

Date: 2004-12-06 05:36 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack (blank by  unen2gemismasin))
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
May he climb in all our windows tonight!!

Pleasant dreams, indeed!

So happy you liked this. Thanks for letting me know. :)

Date: 2004-12-06 09:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hendercats.livejournal.com
Aha! I just knew that if I looked for this *here*, you would have explained (or linked to) Molly history. Thank you. The name rang the proverbial bell, but just couldn't remember any more.

This is quite wonderful. Delightful! I especially liked the part about his hair. Love Jack's hair. :) Seems to me this has a slightly different feel than most of your writings (what I've read, anyway). Perhaps that's because (as you said) you don't often do anything so heavily descriptive...?

Date: 2004-12-06 09:17 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack (blank by  unen2gemismasin))
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Perhaps that's because (as you said) you don't often do anything so heavily descriptive...?

Yes, I am rather a slacker in that area--I tend to think I should leave most description to the reader's imagination. But I think maybe I should work on that in my writing, as I enjoy others' work in that area.

So happy you enjoyed the ficlet! Thanks for letting me know. :)

Date: 2004-12-06 09:23 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hendercats.livejournal.com
Yes, I am rather a slacker in that area--I tend to think I should leave most description to the reader's imagination.

Considering that you're writing about somebody that your audience already knows, I'd hardly call you a slacker! And I see Harry quite clearly - you've thoroughly described her, just not all at once.

Date: 2004-12-07 03:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] doublu.livejournal.com
Oh, okay. Well no matter, it's perfect as it is. heh.

Date: 2004-12-10 11:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] oiseaurobyn.livejournal.com
where, o where, is the next chapter of harry iv? i've been so patient... :)

Date: 2004-12-10 12:02 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Sparrow by ashleygaea)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Oh, I didn't realize you were reading! So sorry, but I have a Secret Santa fic I'm working on--it's due the 20th, and it's four chapters, so I temporarily put Harry IV on hold. If you'd like to read the Secret Santa fic, I'll send you the first two chapters--can't post any of it until the 20th, but I can email it to you. Let me know if you want me to send it.

Date: 2004-12-13 07:54 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] oiseaurobyn.livejournal.com
no no, that's ok. you just need a status entry or something on the harry iv site so we uninformed ones know how long to wait :)

Date: 2004-12-13 08:08 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Santa Jack)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
It'll be about another week, probably. I hava a half a chapter to write on the Christmas one, and then I'll start on Harry IV again. My readers from Harry III probably aren't surprised: it took me four months to complete that one. I get bogged down at certain points, and at others RL or Other Interests consume me. I wrote the first two Harry stories rather quickly, in contrast, Harry I mostly during the Winter Break at school, and the second one following close on its heels, as the plot was more or less the logical continuation of the first story. Norrington's Choice, the third one, didn't have a set plot when I started it, and it took me some time to work out the details, although I knew where I wanted it to end up--as with the first two stories, the end was written before the middle bits. Plot is definitely the most difficult aspect of writing to me. I do have an outline for Harry IV now, and am adding to it as scenes/lines/plotpoints occur to me, but you must be patient, unfortunately.

Great holiday pic on your post, btw! Give our greetings to your family, and holiday hugs to you, too. Yay, Alaskan Cruise!

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