Drabble: The Right Words

[dwgm]

A hundred words, including the title, for the current potc100 challenge, "Farewell"...

~ The Right Words ~

What sort of farewell was suitable for such an occasion? Parting from one who was not only a recent comrade-in-arms, but the son of an old friend. One who'd given all in an effort to do right by ol' Jack! A bit startling, that. Not precisely unprecedented, but... unusual. A rarity. Something of an oddity. But that was a Turner for you. Came through, in the end, regardless of the sacrifice involved. Profound thanks were certainly in order -- but later. When he wasn't so rushed. A briefer encomium would have to suffice:

"Will... nice hat!"


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Comments

[porridgebird.livejournal.com]

Excellent!
And off to the dictionary I go. I like that :)

[choose2live.livejournal.com]

So nice! That line had always sparked a bit of curiosity in me - because, after all, Will certainly deserved more! Very nice job of explaning it.

[honorat.livejournal.com]

Yay! The Hat! This is excellent. I've always thought of those final addresses of Jack to Elizabeth and Will as smoke screen goodbyes. After all, he can't really announce that he's leaving! reminds self to finish fic conversation between Will and Jack about boats and hats

[artaxastra.livejournal.com]

LOL! That's so Jack. Just so very Jack.

[hendercats.livejournal.com]

Excellent!! It always struck me that he had so much to say to Will but (of course!) no time to express it (and certainly no desire to do so in front of that audience, it having to do with feelings and other things behind the mask), and that was what raced through his head in the pause ... that the "nice hat" was the result of his realizing it was impossible to say to Will what really needed to be said. Applause to you for putting it all so well!

[cbtreks.livejournal.com]

Perfect Jack! Right down to the word that sent me scrambling to dictionary.com. (I love having to go to the dictionary - truly - thank you!) The things I learn in fandom - encomium, tribade....

[hereswith.livejournal.com]

It's an odd comment, and it's meant to make us laugh, I suppose, but there's surely something more behind it, just like you describe it here. He couldn't possibly say what he really felt, to Will or Elizabeth, with the situation being what it was. I especially liked this: But that was a Turner for you. Came through, in the end, regardless of the sacrifice involved. And your Jack voice is wonderful, as usual, you write him so well :-) Great work!