Drabble: 'Fool's Chance' (Elizabeth, Jack)

[dwgm]

An island drabble, 150 words, again for the 'Fool' theme, with thanks to hereswith for the quick beta work!



~ Fool’s Chance ~

Elizabeth was disturbed to find that excessive rum did not make her more accepting of the fate that had been handed to them by Barbossa and his rotten crew.

Rotten!

She began to giggle.

“What? What’s so funny?” Jack demanded, his voice sharp, and no more slurred than it ever was.

She schooled her expression and looked down her nose at him. “Nothing whatever, Mr. Sparrow.”

He rolled his eyes, scowling, and muttered, “Captain! It’s Captain!” as he turned his gaze back to the uncaring sea again.

Useless!

Her brain, loosed from its moorings of restraint, began to drift, as in a strong gale, and, in a surprisingly short time, fetched up against a solution to their difficulties. Not only did this have a chance of succeeding, it would completely infuriate her stupidly resigned companion.

Captain Jack Sparrow, indeed! Wait until he observed the Machiavellian wit of Miss Elizabeth Swann.


~.~

Comments

[awickedwench.livejournal.com]

Oh, this is perfect! You've captured them perfectly.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

LOL! Great icon!

I do love Island fics, there was such a fun dynamic between the two. I'm really glad you liked this one!

[sharklady35.livejournal.com]

Oh yes; Jack and Liz on the island are one of the cutest couples around.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

They really are. So glad you liked this!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[compassrose7577.livejournal.com]

Great characterizations!!

Poor Jack never did really know what he was up against until it was far, far too late.

The two of them together on that island was just too precious. Far too many missing scenes there as well. At least we have one more here.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you -- so happy you enjoyed it.

[reneeks.livejournal.com]

That icon is awesome, as is this drabble!! Congrats on a wonderful work!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you! And I've had that icon by inevendim a long time. I love it, too!

[p0wdermonkey.livejournal.com]

I really like that Elizabeth is properly, sillily drunk here. It always irritates me when she remains cool and sober. Even if she poured most of it on the sand she must surely have swallowed enough rum to make anyone but Superwoman or an experienced sailor very wobbly indeed. Of course, being drunk needn't stop her coming up with outrageously bold ideas, as here.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

It always irritates me when she remains cool and sober.

I don't think all the dancing around the bonfire indicated entirely cool and sober, but yes, you're right, sometimes she's written that way in fic, and it doesn't make sense.

And some people need a bit of loosening up to start thinking out of the box. *g*

Glad you liked it!

[hendercats.livejournal.com]

You are amazing, casting new light on this scene after all this time. Especially liked this bit for its lyric beauty and strong visual:
Her brain, loosed from its moorings of restraint, began to drift

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you! Island fics never seem to go out of style. Did you read djarum99's recent one? Fantastic!!

I liked the nautical metaphor -- it seemed appropriate that she'd be thinking like that.

*toasts you with a Mai Tai*

[hendercats.livejournal.com]

Did you read djarum99's recent one?
jenthegypsy emailed me about it, so I'd read it before seeing your rec. It is marvelous! And slips into canon quite easily, I thought.

Gah - wrong icon! *edits*

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

And slips into canon quite easily, I thought.

That's what I thought, too. Neither of them are out of character, which so often happens in R or NC-17 Island fics.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you!! I could see her getting giggly, and trying not to show it in front of Jack.

Machiavellian is a great word, and I could see her knowing it, what with her dad being the governor and all.

So happy you enjoyed it!

[florencia7.livejournal.com]

Great drabble! PERFECT last line. Loved it!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you!!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thanks! She's cute when she's tipsy. *g*

[kseenaa.livejournal.com]

*grin* Yeah, just you wait, Jack! The rum will soon be gone!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Yes, indeed! Glad to have made you smile with this one. Thank you so much for all the comments you left these last couple of days -- I really appreciate it!

[kseenaa.livejournal.com]

Well, I was a bit behind on my reading, but now I am all caught up again! :-D