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Stormalong by florencia7COMPLETE!!!! And a day before my (self-imposed) deadline. Not only the fic, but my [livejournal.com profile] 10_hurt_comfort table, too!

Thanks, as always, to my dear beta reader [livejournal.com profile] hereswith, who not only has the sharpest eye for errors and repeated words, but has such wonderful suggestions on phrasing, characterization, etc. My work in vastly improved through her expert assistance.

~ Stormalong ~

Chapter One: Errand
Chapter Two: Disaster
Chapter Three: Shadows
Chapter Four: Persuasion
Chapter Five: Trouble
Chapter Six: Complications
Chapter Seven: Darkness


Chapter Eight: Morning


What a difference a fortnight made!

Soeur Marguerite out of danger. Jamie nearly his lively, mischievous self again. And Elizabeth could at last take the time to enjoy a morning's leisure in her cabin on the Empress.

She was sipping her coffee and was half way through the dispatches that had arrived from the Cove the evening before when there was a scratch upon the door and Father Anselm was announced. She stood up as he came in, and returned his bow gravely enough, though her eyes twinkled at his pinched, disapproving expression. "Will you sit down and take coffee with me, Father?"

"No, I thank you," he replied, stiffly. "Capitaine Swann, I have come to lodge a protest, to implore you to use whatever power and influence may be yours in curbing the untoward behavior of your colleague, Capitaine Barbossa!"

Elizabeth widened her eyes. "But Father! I was under the impression he'd been on his very best behavior these three weeks and more, since his arrival on the Île. He and his men have joined in the rebuilding of your town with the greatest good will!"

The priest frowned. " I do not speak of that. We are, of course, infinitely grateful for the assistance your people have lent in this regard. The rift between the Cove and the Île is ended. Better than ended. As if it had never been! But Barbossa's sin is grave nonetheless, showing favor, nay, tempting a holy woman! A woman who should be beyond reproach in the eyes of all! A woman who most certainly should not be exposed to the vile blandishments of a… of a pirate! You will forgive my candor on this head."

Will I, indeed? Elizabeth's smile had vanished, but she ignored the general insult, for the moment, and focused on the more specific one. "And is she not beyond reproach, Father? You speak of Soeur Marguerite, I take it, but I am not aware that Captain Barbossa has done ought but converse a little with her in the evenings, and arrange that flowers be brought to the church to bring her joy, and joy to everyone who has been ill. Is his sin so grave?"

Father Anselm reddened, and he looked quite severe. "He should not thus single her out! Scandalous enough that he laid unclean hands upon her when she first succumbed to the malady!"

"Should he have let her fall to the ground and perhaps be injured?" Elizabeth protested.

"She is a bride of Christ, and should not have been touched by such an one. He should have called for help, leaving her to those more worthy."

Elizabeth's eyes blazed, but with an effort she controlled her wrath. "Father Anselm, your people have never shown anything but the greatest love and respect for Soeur Marguerite, from the day I arrived to this. As for her association with Hector Barbossa, I can only point out that her actions are most in keeping with those of He to whom she's wed, He who did not scorn to befriend sinners. But content yourself, Father! The rebuilding is well in hand and the townsfolk are quite capable of completing it on their own. The plague has run its course. We will be leaving within the week, and I daresay you will find it a great relief to no longer have your town overrun by pirates."

*

Jack came into the cabin as Father Anselm was bowing himself out. Having observed the priest's face, and now seeing at Elizabeth's he raised a brow and gave a low whistle. "Lord, what did he say to you? You look ripe for murder."

"I am!" she asserted. She sat down and put her hands to her head. "Oh! He's such a… a…"

"Hypocrite?" Jack suggested, perching on the edge of the table, beside her. He picked up her cup of coffee and took a sip.

"Yes!" She looked up, outrage swelling. "Would you believe it? He told me Soeur Marguerite should have fallen to the ground unaided rather than be manhandled by Barbossa!"

"And this surprises you?" Jack set the cup down again and smiled, all fond indulgence. "You're still such an innocent, love."

"I'll swear no one else here is of that opinion!"

"Probably more'n you'd think hold with it, though it ain't general, and only the priest dares to broach the subject. But it's time to take our leave, darlin'. Don't want to wear out our welcome."

"No." Elizabeth leaned back, and she could not help it, her heart grew lighter for love of the man before her, his strange beauty, his courage, his wit. If ever a monarch had an ideal helpmeet, it was Elizabeth Swann, King of Pirates. But she said only, "I wonder what he'll say when he learns Henri is coming with us?"

Jack shrugged. "Don't much care, and I doubt Henri does, either. He's a right one, is Henri. And not just because he's taken such a liking to Jamie, though I can't think of a finer tutor for the lad. A man of parts, is Henri Pontchartrain."

"Yes, he's a worthy opponent in chess as well, I gather." Elizabeth grinned. "He and Ragetti have a contest going, and Ragetti says Henri is 'up to every rig and row'."

"Aye! Can't beat 'im more'n three out of five meself. Told him I'd teach him swordplay, too, which should be amusing."

"Perhaps Barbossa would be better suited to that task," Elizabeth suggested, slyly, standing. She slipped a teasing hand under his coat, along his ribs.

He started, scowled, and stood up himself, pulling her hard against him. "Are you implying my swordplay ain't what it should be, you scurvy wench?"

She chuckled. "That's King scurvy wench to you, knave!"

He grinned. "So it is, Your Nibs," he agreed, his voice full of love and laughter, and he kissed her.

*

Barbossa's eyes were focused on the bright sea ahead as the Maid left the harbor of Île Sainte-Thérèse behind. Always did him good to be at sea. Washed the decks clean, brushed the cobwebs away. A month on land was too much for a man. No wonder Jack'd gone a bit mad – madder – during that time he'd spent in the Locker.

But this last month had been a strange one, no question, and maybe he'd gone a bit mad himself.

Smitten by a nun, of all things.

She'd reminded him of a lass he'd known, long ago, when he'd been no more'n a lad himself. Growing up in the same village, he hadn't thought much of her. She were quieter than the other lasses, slender and dark, with a sober look in her eye, though the expressive, beautiful lips had a humorous curve 'round the edges. But she did him a kindness, once, though he was beneath her notice, she being the daughter of the local reverend and him just the youngest of Maggie Washer's fatherless brood.

He was set to go to sea, but after that kindness he'd begun to eye the lass, and wonder about her. And though it were a terrible risk for both of 'em, he'd gotten to know her some, in a friendly way, and then… well, more serious. He couldn't deny it. Hadn't touched her, he'd at least had that much sense, though he'd ached with wanting it, and near the end had nigh strained his wrist seekin' solitary relief in out of the way corners. Not that there weren't plenty of willing lasses to ease him, if he'd had a mind. But in a village that small, she'd have heard, and thought less of him, and that he couldn't have.

So it'd been nothin' but talk between 'em, sweet but less than satisfying, until the last night, before he was to take the highroad for Bristol. She'd kissed him. And he'd kissed her.

You wouldn't think just a kiss would make that much of a mark on a man.

A year later she was gone. Same plague that'd taken his mother and youngest sister. That'd been a hard time. A hard time, and no mistake.

Well, Marguerite was safe. He'd seen to that. Helped with it, anyway. It'd please him to set his cook makin' all sorts of dainties for her when the fever'd left her so weak but on the mend, and the children of the village to gathering flowers, armloads of 'em, fillin' every vase and bowl they could find. Better'n that bloody incense. Made up some for that wound he'd taken so long ago, too, as had their conversation, of an evening. She was a treasure, sure enough.

He knew that damned priest had gone to Lizzie about it, though she'd never said anything. Fella probably set up her back – he was that sort. His expression had been priceless when Hector'd walked into the church carrying Marguerite. Scum o' the earth. Hector'd ignored the blackguard. Oh, he'd been circumspect enough in his dealings, and never moreso than that very morning, when he and Marguerite had bid each other adieu. A look, a brush of his lips on the back of her hand. Nothin' more than that. But that hadn't been for fear of the priest, but for love of the lady.

Love! Hector shifted a bit, his hands tightening on the spokes of the wheel. Maybe that wasn't the right word.

But then again, maybe it was.



Finis

Date: 2008-05-18 06:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dharma-slut.livejournal.com
Hector's got a gir-ul, Hector's got a gir-ul, Hector's got a gir-ul... nah na na na nah!

What a pleasure to read-- thankee kindly, Geekmama! <3

Date: 2008-05-18 06:30 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
You're welcome! Thank you for coming along on the ride. *g*

Date: 2008-05-18 06:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tiamary.livejournal.com
Dang dang dang! I was so hoping the coda would reveal that the nun and Barbossa had been nekkid and up ta sumthin'! Ah well. Can't have everything. You're to be commended for showing respect for the vows of persons of the cloth, even if I WAS hoping for some X-TREEM Naughtiness. ;) Thanks for the novella!

Date: 2008-05-18 07:03 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - At World's End)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
LOL! You'll have to check the tabloids, where I'm sure you'll have no difficulty finding stories like that. As in any walk of life, it's that sort of thing that makes the news, because it is so unusual, and such a betrayal of what they are supposed to stand for. The countless stories of hard-working people, quietly doing what they can to make the world a better place, don't sell newspapers.

But I'm glad you enjoyed the story, in spite of the lack of illicit nookie in the last chapter, and I thank you very much for reading and commenting!

Enjoyed your post on [livejournal.com profile] potc_feminist this morning, btw, though I'm way behind in commenting on virtually everything. Now that this is finished I'll be able to catch up some.

Date: 2008-05-18 07:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sharklady35.livejournal.com
Congrats on creating the most believable sympathetic!Barbossa I've encountered in any fic.

Great series!

Date: 2008-05-18 08:00 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack - FTW! by Sepira)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you! Hector isn't all bad, which was more noticeable in AWE than in CotBP, I must admit. Glad you enjoyed the story!

Date: 2008-05-18 08:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sharklady35.livejournal.com
> Hector isn't all bad, which was more noticeable in AWE than in CotBP... <

Indeed; he was really another person in that movie. Which I didn't mind, because his interactions with Jack were *so* interesting.

And your references to his early years are, too.

Date: 2008-05-18 08:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] torn-eledhwen.livejournal.com
Yay, a happy ending. :) And Barbossa in love is an irresistible image. Lovely story, GM!

Date: 2008-05-19 02:02 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you! So glad you enjoyed it!!

Date: 2008-05-18 08:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fried-flamingo.livejournal.com
A beautiful end to the story. And Hector in love! I'd love to read a bit more of that if the inclination takes you and see what happened with Barbossa and Soeur Margerite in those weeks.

Thanks for sharing the tale, it's been a lovely read!

Date: 2008-05-19 02:03 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack - FTW! by Sepira)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
I'd love to read a bit more of that if the inclination takes you and see what happened with Barbossa and Soeur Margerite in those weeks.

Might just do that, actually. Thank you for reading and commenting -- I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

Date: 2008-05-18 09:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] artaxastra.livejournal.com
Oh lovely! A great wrap up! And I love Hector finally feeling something for the one who he never should! And Jack's swordplay! I always return to your stories like coming home, and this one was wonderful. I've enjoyed it so much!

Date: 2008-05-19 02:07 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack - FTW! by Sepira)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
I love Hector finally feeling something for the one who he never should!

I was thinking of a more tragic ending, but I think she'll be of far more influence with Hector alive. ;)

I'm so happy you liked the story. Thank you very much for following along and giving me such encouraging feedback. I really appreciate it!

Date: 2008-05-18 10:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] florencia7.livejournal.com
That was such a fantastic story! I really enjoyed reading it. Amazing work:) I loved it!

Date: 2008-05-19 02:08 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you so much!! And for the FF.net review, too -- that was so nice of you.

Date: 2008-05-19 01:38 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mary684.livejournal.com
Aww, the gentleman Hector, could he be any sweeter? I like that you gave him some sweet history and didn't emasculate him at all, as a matter of fact, you've fleshed out his mericful nature and sense of fair play. *g*

I like the happy ending and Liz and Jack just sizzle in this chapter.

Date: 2008-05-19 02:11 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack - FTW! by Sepira)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
you've fleshed out his mericful nature and sense of fair play.

As I've said before, I don't think Elizabeth would have accepted him as her mentor if he hadn't been a good man and a pirate.

Not as good as Jack, of course. I'm so glad you liked that part, too!

Thank you for reading and commenting throughout -- I appreciate it so much!

Date: 2008-05-19 02:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] breathless-dawn.livejournal.com
This was lovely. I think I will be rereading this very soon. Again, I loved your Hector. He was lovely. Great work!

Date: 2008-05-19 03:58 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you! I hope it holds up to a revisit. :))

Date: 2008-05-19 01:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] this-weirdness.livejournal.com
A great end to a great story, and a lovely glimpse of Barbossa and his past. Love can be found between the most unlikely people can't it? I thought the backstory you provided for him made his feelings for Soeur Marguerite entirely plausible. Barbossa is probably my next favourite character after Jack. He was such a meanie in CotBP, but I couldn't help feeling sorry for him. Ten years being undead would take its toll on any man! Look at what a few months in the Locker did to Jack! ;)

Loved it!

Date: 2008-05-19 01:39 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack - FTW! by Sepira)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you so much!

Barbossa... was such a meanie in CotBP, but I couldn't help feeling sorry for him.

One couldn't help feeling for him, in spite of his being a murderous pirate. But yes, that ten years must have made him quite desperate. And in AWE, one could tell his priorities had been reshuffled (to paraphrase Jack, who knew about being dead). I'm glad you thought Barbossa was in character here.

Date: 2008-05-19 02:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] p0wdermonkey.livejournal.com
Dear Hector! One can only hope he still has the monkey for company.

I honestly thought you were going to kill off Soeur Marguerite, but this was much more better! Love that there's now renewed tension between Elizabeth and Father Anselm (and therefore perhaps between islanders and pirates). Things could get very interesting if either side needs help from the other again... Can you tell I'm hoping for a Hector/Marguerite sequel?

And, yes, Jack would despise hypocrisy worse than anything.

Date: 2008-05-19 02:12 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (PotC - Monkey!)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
One can only hope he still has the monkey for company.

I felt the lack of the monkey, and thought to put in something about Hector keeping him out of the way of the plague, but didn't, so it's still up in the air. And I actually had thought of killing off Soeur Marguerite! But I didn't want it to end on such a tragic note, so we just get hopeless love instead.

I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for reading and commenting -- I do appreciate it so much.

*returns to reading 'Nuts Out'*

Date: 2008-05-19 05:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] komandant-krech.livejournal.com
Barbs is smitten! Lol!

Nah, seriously -- he's such a great guy in this (well, he was a great guy in the films as well!) -- thanks for adding some deepness and 'humanity' to his character.

This was really an enjoyable tale -- thanks, dear :) You write children especially well.

Date: 2008-05-19 07:50 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Between by notglassdoll)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
I love writing kids (and OC's in general, actually -- can't seem to help populating my fic with numerous examples). Thank you so much for following along, and commenting all the way -- I really appreciate it. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Date: 2008-05-20 08:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hereswith.livejournal.com
A little late, but I wanted to say congratulations, again, on finishing both this wonderful fic and your h/c table! Yay! You've done a great job on all of the stories, and I love how you write both the canon characters and the OCs. The scene between Jack and Lizzie here is delicous, the swordplay lines still make me smile, and Barbossa smitten, now, that's a great closing image ;-)

And thank you for your kind words! *hugs*
Edited Date: 2008-05-20 08:32 pm (UTC)

Date: 2008-05-22 07:41 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Between by notglassdoll)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you so much for commenting here, too -- so sweet of you! Maybe we need to have a little more Barbossa & Soeur Marguerite one of these days...!

xoxo

Date: 2008-05-22 09:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hereswith.livejournal.com
a little more Barbossa & Soeur Marguerite Yes!!! That would be wonderful ;-)

Date: 2008-05-25 01:47 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] obfusc8er.livejournal.com
Just wanted to say I enjoyed this story.

I guess some people are only open and welcoming when they need help. Once that's through--out with the ruffians and unrulies! Good writing. Thanks for the fic.

Date: 2008-05-25 02:27 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Between by notglassdoll)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Well, to be fair, the priest didn't know Barbossa, and he's pretty scary looking.

Glad you enjoyed the story! Thanks for letting me know. :)

Stormalong

Date: 2008-06-08 12:35 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] equilibrium44.livejournal.com
I'm backtracking around the site and found your story. Liked it much. I started at the beginning and read it through. You brought out the sweetness in them all-even Barbossa, a real shocker.

Of course, I am sure real pirates of the era would have burned down the church and run. But we aren't dealing with real pirates.

Re: Stormalong

Date: 2008-06-09 01:21 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E - Between by notglassdoll)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
we aren't dealing with real pirates.

We're not, but on the other hand I'm sure there were all kinds of pirates back then, some of them with families and ties to various communities, etc. One man's pirate is another's privateer, too.

Because of the changes I saw in Barbossa's character in AWE, and because of [livejournal.com profile] p0wdermonkey's wonderful fic, I started to think of him in a different way. He and Jack have such an interesting relationship, like crotchety relatives or something. Too much fun to write!

Thank you for reading, and for letting me know you enjoyed it!

Date: 2009-06-28 08:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lolitalockhart.livejournal.com
I just read these series of fics! I loved it. So cute, and sad, and I loved all the original characters and the lovely plot, and how you wrote everyone! <3 I love fics like this.

Date: 2009-06-28 09:13 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (J/E Fire by Erinya)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you! What a nice surprise to receive your kind words on this sunny Sunday afternoon. I'm so happy you enjoyed the story!

Date: 2009-06-29 02:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lolitalockhart.livejournal.com
You're welcome! I really enjoyed this fic very much. <3 Unique ideas are always my favorite!

It is warm here too but too hot for my pale skin, I'm Dutch so I burn easily, I stay inside. T_T

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