Drabble: 'An Execrable Business'

[dwgm]

Exactly 200 words (without the title) for the 'Tortuga' prompt at blackpearlsails, with thanks to hereswith for the beta read.




~ An Execrable Business ~


A sly hand slid into the pocket but, instead of the usual reward of purse and coin, the victim swirled 'round and changed to victor, strong fingers gripping the errant wrist.

"What's this?" Triumphant eyes narrowed, and the gravelly, rum-slurred voice said, accusingly, "You're a girl!"

"Am not!"

"Are."

"Not! Let me go!"

"Not likely."

The other wrist was caught and the thief jerked roughly into the shadows and slammed against a wall. The eyes raked, and a curl of lip was seen, with a glint of gold. "Overmuch whimpering and squirming for not-a-girl."

The squirming ceased, with some effort. "I do not whimper!"

"Oh, no. Nor blub, neither, I daresay."

There was an awkward pause; a lower lip was bitten, and a trembling chin firmed. "Wh-what are you going to do?"

The painful hold eased slightly. "Rather depends on your candor, or lack thereof, don't it? For example, if you was to tell me how a gently bred lass ends up picking pockets in a Tortuga alley – most execrable in circumstance, intent, and execution – I might be persuaded not to hand you over to the authorities."

"Gently bred? I—"

"The low accent needs work, darlin'."

"Oh."

"Oh. "




TBC…

Comments

[stealmybike.livejournal.com]

Beautiful, yet simple start on your OFC character. I'm really intrigued to see who she might be and how this will develop!

Loved this line, I thought it was so very Jack: "The painful hold eased slightly. "Rather depends on your candor, or lack thereof, don't it? For example, if you was to tell me how a gently bred lass ends up picking pockets in a Tortuga alley – most execrable in circumstance, intent, and execution – I might be persuaded not to hand you over to the authorities."

Looking forward to more! :)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

I like seeing how economically I can draw a scene, and drabbles are so perfect for practice in that. I'm not even sure where this is going, lol! But it should be fun, wherever it goes. *g*

Thank you so much for commenting! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[stealmybike.livejournal.com]

It's interesting to see where something takes you, in my opinion. I have an OFC fic I'm working on as well, and I've chosen to write it one chapter at a time to see where my creativity takes off.

I say that only because I know many writers who have written their whole story out before posting it. I just find it more fun to do the opposite.

This is a very interesting start! I hope it takes you in places you've never imagined ;)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

I did a story right before DMC came out that started out as a drabble and featured Jack/OFC, and it was really fun to do in a drabble by drabble way, though it took me about five months to finish, lol! I expect Jack's been involved with lots of females throughout his life, so the potential for Jack/OFC is very high.

[stealmybike.livejournal.com]

I feel the very same way! My Jack/OFC fic has taken me about 7 months to get to chapter 23! lol. I'm not entirely finished yet, but it's good to be about halfway done with it!

Oh, just wanted to ask you, how is your Weatherby mom fic coming out?

I'm very interested to see how you're going to go about writing that one! :)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

I haven't begun to write my Weatherby's Mom fic, but I've been thinking about what I want to write. What's the deadline?

[stealmybike.livejournal.com]

No deadline for the fics have been set as of yet. That will most likely be decided on Friday 1/16 when everyone's picked their characters.

Of course, I'll keep you informed :)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

OK, I'll be on the lookout on or after the 16th.

[were-lemur.livejournal.com]

Nifty!

"Overmuch whimpering and squirming for not-a-girl."

*sporfles* Jack is just so ... Jackly!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Jackly Jack is pretty irresistable. I'm glad you enjoyed this snippet! Thank you for letting me know.

[kseenaa.livejournal.com]

He he he... Neat. ;-)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

(Love that Scruffington icon!!!)

[kseenaa.livejournal.com]

He he.... :-) Thanx! It is made by subplotter, so credit her if you wanna use it. (She made this one to...)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Oooh, that one's nice, too!

[aravah.livejournal.com]

LOL! I really enjoyed this. Very piratey. :)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Arrrr! So happy you liked it!

[mary684.livejournal.com]

This is awesome! Very Jack, very hot The eyes raked, and a curl of lip was seen, with a glint of gold. *fans self*

This is deliciously Jack! "Rather depends on your candor, or lack thereof, don't it? For example, if you was to tell me how a gently bred lass ends up picking pockets in a Tortuga alley – most execrable in circumstance, intent, and execution – I might be persuaded not to hand you over to the authorities."
And you get extra points for "execrable" -- made me look it up, you did! *g*

Looking forward to more!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you!! Jack just can't help being hot. Mmmmm...

Ahem.

Always happy to achieve extra vocabulary points! That's one great thing about pirate!fic, isn't it? So much potential for fabulous wordage.

More soon. Maybe I should do it as a choose-your-own-adventure story... *g*

[sharklady35.livejournal.com]

> ...I might be persuaded not to hand you over to the authorities." <

What authorities? This is Tortuga!

If this is the first act to a full-fledged fic, I'll be interested in seeing where it goes (and though that lass probably doesn't know it yet, she's *real* lucky it was Jack Sparrow who caught her.)

BTW: I like that new icon! I suppose it represents a dead plot bunny?

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

What authorities? This is Tortuga!

I expect even so lawless a place as Tortuga has some kind of authority, and certainly in my Harry & the Pirate stories I created a mayor for the town. He was a lot of fun.

Yes, the young missy is very lucky. More soon, no doubt.

compassrose7577 sent me a couple of notebooks with that pirate plot bunny on it, so I had to make an icon! He's kinda crazy looking, appropriately enough.

Thank you for commenting!

[florencia7.livejournal.com]

That was fantastic! Awesome scene. And I love Jack in this - absolutely irresistible! ^^

Can't wait for more! :)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Jack is a pretty irresistible fellow, as we all know. I'm very happy you thought him Jackish in this, and yes, more's coming soon. Thank you for letting me know you liked it!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Drunken Ninja Pirate? Could be, could be...

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[pearlseed.livejournal.com]

Oh boy, where do we go from here? I've not even seen her yet, but she's gotten my attention. I'm thinking she definitely needs some schooling if she was so gullible/new to have attempted to pick Jack's pocket--or desperate, in which case she'll be an adorable addition to his chosen heart family. Here's to her being just as stubborn as Jack, as bright and creative, and as willing! Thank you for a shiny new! Like Kaylee in Firefly, I just love it when there are passengers aboard with all their stories!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

I love Kaylee.

Thank you for reading and for your (as always) deliciously inimitable comments! More soon, in a light vein. Distraction is good at taxtime, and lightens the post-holiday atmosphere. ;)

[artaxastra.livejournal.com]

This is fun. You have Jack's voice perfectly!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you! We aim to please. ;)