Drabble: 'An Execrable Business'
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Exactly 200 words (without the title) for the 'Tortuga' prompt at
blackpearlsails, with thanks to
hereswith for the beta read.
~ An Execrable Business ~
A sly hand slid into the pocket but, instead of the usual reward of purse and coin, the victim swirled 'round and changed to victor, strong fingers gripping the errant wrist.
"What's this?" Triumphant eyes narrowed, and the gravelly, rum-slurred voice said, accusingly, "You're a girl!"
"Am not!"
"Are."
"Not! Let me go!"
"Not likely."
The other wrist was caught and the thief jerked roughly into the shadows and slammed against a wall. The eyes raked, and a curl of lip was seen, with a glint of gold. "Overmuch whimpering and squirming for not-a-girl."
The squirming ceased, with some effort. "I do not whimper!"
"Oh, no. Nor blub, neither, I daresay."
There was an awkward pause; a lower lip was bitten, and a trembling chin firmed. "Wh-what are you going to do?"
The painful hold eased slightly. "Rather depends on your candor, or lack thereof, don't it? For example, if you was to tell me how a gently bred lass ends up picking pockets in a Tortuga alley – most execrable in circumstance, intent, and execution – I might be persuaded not to hand you over to the authorities."
"Gently bred? I—"
"The low accent needs work, darlin'."
"Oh."
"Oh. "
TBC…
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~ An Execrable Business ~
A sly hand slid into the pocket but, instead of the usual reward of purse and coin, the victim swirled 'round and changed to victor, strong fingers gripping the errant wrist.
"What's this?" Triumphant eyes narrowed, and the gravelly, rum-slurred voice said, accusingly, "You're a girl!"
"Am not!"
"Are."
"Not! Let me go!"
"Not likely."
The other wrist was caught and the thief jerked roughly into the shadows and slammed against a wall. The eyes raked, and a curl of lip was seen, with a glint of gold. "Overmuch whimpering and squirming for not-a-girl."
The squirming ceased, with some effort. "I do not whimper!"
"Oh, no. Nor blub, neither, I daresay."
There was an awkward pause; a lower lip was bitten, and a trembling chin firmed. "Wh-what are you going to do?"
The painful hold eased slightly. "Rather depends on your candor, or lack thereof, don't it? For example, if you was to tell me how a gently bred lass ends up picking pockets in a Tortuga alley – most execrable in circumstance, intent, and execution – I might be persuaded not to hand you over to the authorities."
"Gently bred? I—"
"The low accent needs work, darlin'."
"Oh."
"Oh. "
TBC…
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Date: 2009-01-10 05:04 pm (UTC)Loved this line, I thought it was so very Jack: "The painful hold eased slightly. "Rather depends on your candor, or lack thereof, don't it? For example, if you was to tell me how a gently bred lass ends up picking pockets in a Tortuga alley – most execrable in circumstance, intent, and execution – I might be persuaded not to hand you over to the authorities."
Looking forward to more! :)
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Date: 2009-01-10 05:30 pm (UTC)Thank you so much for commenting! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Date: 2009-01-10 05:35 pm (UTC)I say that only because I know many writers who have written their whole story out before posting it. I just find it more fun to do the opposite.
This is a very interesting start! I hope it takes you in places you've never imagined ;)
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Date: 2009-01-10 08:05 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2009-01-10 08:10 pm (UTC)Oh, just wanted to ask you, how is your Weatherby mom fic coming out?
I'm very interested to see how you're going to go about writing that one! :)
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Date: 2009-01-10 08:29 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2009-01-10 08:36 pm (UTC)Of course, I'll keep you informed :)
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Date: 2009-01-10 08:37 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2009-01-10 06:02 pm (UTC)"Overmuch whimpering and squirming for not-a-girl."
*sporfles* Jack is just so ... Jackly!
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Date: 2009-01-10 08:07 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2009-01-10 06:05 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2009-01-10 08:07 pm (UTC)(Love that Scruffington icon!!!)
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Date: 2009-01-10 08:43 pm (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2009-01-10 06:10 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2009-01-10 08:08 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2009-01-10 06:39 pm (UTC)This is deliciously Jack! "Rather depends on your candor, or lack thereof, don't it? For example, if you was to tell me how a gently bred lass ends up picking pockets in a Tortuga alley – most execrable in circumstance, intent, and execution – I might be persuaded not to hand you over to the authorities."
And you get extra points for "execrable" -- made me look it up, you did! *g*
Looking forward to more!
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Date: 2009-01-10 08:12 pm (UTC)Ahem.
Always happy to achieve extra vocabulary points! That's one great thing about pirate!fic, isn't it? So much potential for fabulous wordage.
More soon. Maybe I should do it as a choose-your-own-adventure story... *g*
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Date: 2009-01-10 07:33 pm (UTC)What authorities? This is Tortuga!
If this is the first act to a full-fledged fic, I'll be interested in seeing where it goes (and though that lass probably doesn't know it yet, she's *real* lucky it was Jack Sparrow who caught her.)
BTW: I like that new icon! I suppose it represents a dead plot bunny?
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Date: 2009-01-10 08:17 pm (UTC)I expect even so lawless a place as Tortuga has some kind of authority, and certainly in my Harry & the Pirate stories I created a mayor for the town. He was a lot of fun.
Yes, the young missy is very lucky. More soon, no doubt.
Thank you for commenting!
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Date: 2009-01-10 11:40 pm (UTC)Can't wait for more! :)
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Date: 2009-01-10 11:49 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2009-01-11 07:46 am (UTC)Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Date: 2009-01-11 03:12 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2009-01-11 07:50 am (UTC)Thank you for reading and for your (as always) deliciously inimitable comments! More soon, in a light vein. Distraction is good at taxtime, and lightens the post-holiday atmosphere. ;)
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