dwgm: Kimi Birds (PotC: Swanns by Fried Flamingo)
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This one, though it's more sweet than bitter, really does qualify for the current drabble challenge prompt, 'The Dead'. 150 words, set at Shipwreck Cove, with thanks again to [livejournal.com profile] hereswith for looking it over.




~ Dear Departed ~

Teague was strolling about the common room, showing off Elizabeth's son, Jamie, six months old now and displaying, amid smiles and gurgling laughter, a brand new tooth - his first.

"Application of strong rum was called for, direct on the gums. Jack and Lizzie were at wit's end with the lad's fussing. Had to step in. I'm an old hand at this sort of thing."

Over at a corner table, half in shadow, Jack shook his head sadly. "Yet another incident I'll never live down."

Elizabeth smiled, but said, wistfully, "I don't mind it. I only wish my father had had his chance."

Jack patted her hand, and gave it a light squeeze. "D'you think he would've known about the trick with the rum?"

"Maybe. But it would have been the finest cognac, rather than rum." And she lifted her tankard in a salute to the dear, very dear departed.


~.~

Date: 2009-11-18 01:39 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pearlseed.livejournal.com
Oh geez louise, that last line is utterly drop dead fine. That is to say, so sweet that Elisabeth would include her father in this very very sweet moment. And that Jack would be so dear about it. Just darlin', darlin'!

Date: 2009-11-18 01:47 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (PotC: Swanns by Fried Flamingo)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you so much, ma'am! I'm glad it made you happy.

*hug*

Date: 2009-11-18 02:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ladymouse2.livejournal.com
Just...Awwwwww!

Date: 2009-11-18 03:24 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (PotC: Swanns by Fried Flamingo)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Hee! Thank you for letting me know you enjoyed it. :)

Date: 2009-11-18 02:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] viva-lla-gloria.livejournal.com
This is so sweet! There's something very cozy about this scene of Jack, Teague and Elizabeth.

Date: 2009-11-18 03:23 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (PotC: Swanns by Fried Flamingo)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you! Even pirates are cozy, sometimes. :)

Date: 2009-11-18 02:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sharklady35.livejournal.com
I'm terribly tempted to declare this an "Awwwww"some fic.

: struggles to resist temptation :

Date: 2009-11-18 03:22 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (PotC: Swanns by Fried Flamingo)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
We all need a little "Awwww", occasionally. *g* Thank you for reading and commenting!

Praise from Willofthewisp

Date: 2009-11-18 03:06 am (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
Aw, what a nice family moment. Nothing like having your loved ones around when you decide to take time out and remember the ones that aren't there anymore. I like how you describe her as "wistful" rather than sad. It seems like she's accepted her father's death and is recovering from all the horrors that happened to her, although she still misses him greatly, as well she should.

Re: Praise from Willofthewisp

Date: 2009-11-18 03:27 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (PotC: Swanns by Fried Flamingo)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you for your thoughtful comments. I don't think one ever stops missing those that are gone, though life goes on and the pain grows less in time.

Date: 2009-11-18 09:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] florencia7.livejournal.com
A very beautiful family scene - with the dear departed living in the memory of those who are still alive. Wonderful drabble.

Date: 2009-11-19 03:33 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (PotC: Swanns by Fried Flamingo)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you! I love those family scenes, as you know. :)

Date: 2009-11-19 03:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lolitalockhart.livejournal.com
NOOOO. ;_; So sad!

Date: 2009-11-19 03:34 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (PotC: Swanns by Fried Flamingo)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Poor Weatherby. How we all miss him.

Date: 2009-11-19 03:37 am (UTC)
ext_18053: (hseas)
From: [identity profile] djarum99.livejournal.com
A lovely and piratey family scene :-)

Thanks again for responding to the prompt, and for posting your wonderful work at [livejournal.com profile] hseas_challenge

Date: 2009-11-19 03:53 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (PotC: Swanns by Fried Flamingo)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you! Three more to go. :)

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