More Poetry

[dwgm]

Well, after all that complaining about having to write poetry, I managed to put my reply to the current drabble challenge in poetry form...

Her Lover’s Question

Does he like it best upswept
neatly pinned
one or two perfect curls
artistically coaxed
to lie against
that slender, sculpted shoulder
revealing the pale column
of her graceful neck
and the shell-like ears
flawless as the pearls that grace them?

But no. That studied beauty
can’t compare with
the scent and sight
of those golden waves
lying soft and loose
against the white silk of the pillows
light to his shadow
day to his night
tempting, luring, entangling him
in a web of warm, honeyed sun,
hunger assuaged with sweets,
a pirate drawn to bright treasure.



~.~

Comments

[aradiria.livejournal.com]

mmm, wonderfully done. And I think the icon is absolutely fantastic, it helps...excentuate the poem. Or something. :)

[shyaway.livejournal.com]

How beautiful!

[tiggothy.livejournal.com]

Mmm... gorgeous writing as always, luv. I especially liked the mention of pearls and the light imagery in
light to his shadow
day to his night
tempting, luring, entangling him
in a web of warm, honeyed sun

[hereswith.livejournal.com]

See, once you got over that threshold, the words kept coming :-) Lovely poem, and the descriptions are beautiful and very vivid.

Ps. Any chance of you telling who he is, is there? I've tried to guess, but am not completely decided...

[leblacklabel.livejournal.com]

Ah, the delights of Miss Swann's honey-hued hair.

It's all beautiful but I am with the second stanza all the way. I am sure that any of the three likely men would love to be entangled in Miss Swann's web of warm, honeyed sun.

[cymbeline.livejournal.com]

This is so pretty, and right on the mark. Men do appreciate our efforts to "do our hair" but they seem to prefer the soft image that sleeps next to them.

[guanin.livejournal.com]

This is beautiful! Wonderful imagery.

I've friended you, by the way.

[erinya.livejournal.com]

I really like the lines "light to his shadow/day to his night."

That icon is absolutely gorgeous, by the way. Does it say "Call me by my name"?