More Poetry
Apr. 21st, 2005 10:31 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png)
Well, after all that complaining about having to write poetry, I managed to put my reply to the current drabble challenge in poetry form...
Does he like it best upswept
neatly pinned
one or two perfect curls
artistically coaxed
to lie against
that slender, sculpted shoulder
revealing the pale column
of her graceful neck
and the shell-like ears
flawless as the pearls that grace them?
But no. That studied beauty
can’t compare with
the scent and sight
of those golden waves
lying soft and loose
against the white silk of the pillows
light to his shadow
day to his night
tempting, luring, entangling him
in a web of warm, honeyed sun,
hunger assuaged with sweets,
a pirate drawn to bright treasure.
~.~
Her Lover’s Question
Does he like it best upswept
neatly pinned
one or two perfect curls
artistically coaxed
to lie against
that slender, sculpted shoulder
revealing the pale column
of her graceful neck
and the shell-like ears
flawless as the pearls that grace them?
But no. That studied beauty
can’t compare with
the scent and sight
of those golden waves
lying soft and loose
against the white silk of the pillows
light to his shadow
day to his night
tempting, luring, entangling him
in a web of warm, honeyed sun,
hunger assuaged with sweets,
a pirate drawn to bright treasure.
~.~
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Date: 2005-04-21 11:51 am (UTC)light to his shadow
day to his night
tempting, luring, entangling him
in a web of warm, honeyed sun
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Date: 2005-04-21 11:55 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2005-04-21 11:56 am (UTC)Ps. Any chance of you telling who he is, is there? I've tried to guess, but am not completely decided...
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Date: 2005-04-21 12:01 pm (UTC)And I deliberately kept the pairing ambiguous, so it could be Will, or Jack, or even Norrington. *G*
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Date: 2005-04-21 01:33 pm (UTC)It's all beautiful but I am with the second stanza all the way. I am sure that any of the three likely men would love to be entangled in Miss Swann's web of warm, honeyed sun.
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Date: 2005-04-21 02:24 pm (UTC)I expect so. We all have our favorite pairings, and who am I to rain on another's parade.
Thank you for the lovely comments!
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Date: 2005-04-21 04:23 pm (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2005-04-21 05:54 pm (UTC)I've friended you, by the way.
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Date: 2005-04-21 08:03 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2005-04-21 06:26 pm (UTC)That icon is absolutely gorgeous, by the way. Does it say "Call me by my name"?
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Date: 2005-04-21 08:09 pm (UTC)Thank you for the lovely comments, both here and at BP Sails. As for those lines, it's odd how the simplest words can sometimes be so effective. I try to remember that, when I'm tempted to get too flowery in my writing.