Monday Morning Angst

[dwgm]

I would so much prefer to be on vacation today. Perhaps that thought has inspired this, my answer to this week's drabble challenge at Black Pearl Sails:

~ Lost Treasure ~

There was an audible gasp from behind him as he let the crown slip from his fingers. It didn't make much of a splash. Surprisingly numb, he watched it as it faded, falling into transparent black, turning and winking where the moonlight penetrated, ghostly silver fingers on buttery gold and colorful cut gems.

Gone. Then, a second later, a final glimmer from the depths.

Then gone, indeed.

Behind him, Elizabeth found her voice. "Jack! Why?"

He raised his eyes. Past stone and rippling silver water, to where the great ship lay anchored, waiting.

"Burial at sea, Miss Swann."



~.~

Comments

[shrieking-ell.livejournal.com]

Oh Poor Jack! I really liked this little window into Jack's feelings right here. Last line is so very right!

(Apologies for commenting here rather than at BPS - i tend to never comment much there for some reason or other)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Glad you liked this, in spite of the angst. ;)

(No apology necessary--comments are appreciated anywhere! -- and it's easier to reply, here, too.)

[lj_stowaway]

OW.

Just, ow.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

I know. Poor Jack.

*sniffles, dolefully*

[hereswith.livejournal.com]

Oh. Wonderful, as always. I love the description of how the crown sinks, the falling into transparent black and ghostly silver fingers on buttery gold. It's a good thing we know it ends well, though, isn't it? :-)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

It's a good thing we know it ends well, though, isn't it?

I don't think I could bear to write things like this, otherwise.

I'm glad you liked it. :)

[shyaway.livejournal.com]

So sad! Burial at sea hurts more because you know that's what he wants - at least, would prefer it to any other burial - and that's what he won't get from the navy. The description of the crown sinking is beautiful.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

you know that's what he wants - at least, would prefer it to any other burial - and that's what he won't get from the navy

That was the point--so happy you got it! I'm glad you liked it, in spite of the angst. ;)

[shyaway.livejournal.com]

I'm in the mood for angst lately!

Speaking of which ... if you're not too busy, could you beta something for me, please? It's an angsty Jack/Scarlett one-shot of about a thousand words.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Sure! Send it -- although I must warn you, I have a long day ahead, so I might not get to it until tomorrow. But I'll do it.

[virgo-79.livejournal.com]

Haunting, and very nicely done!

I like the notion that he's committing part of himself along with the crown. And while it seems like such a priceless thing to let go of, it's worthless to him, compared to what he came seeking and lost.

Subtle and sad, and very good, geekmama.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

it's worthless to him, compared to what he came seeking and lost.

That was the other point (see my reply to __shy__). Thank you. I'm glad you liked this. ;)

[jenthegypsy.livejournal.com]

They have said it all before me, and said it very well

(seems that should be the first line of a poem....)

so I will just say that you do 'Monday morning angst' the way that you do everything else - beautifully! Angst well written, my dear.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you. As hereswith said, it's a good thing we know how it turns out. Glad you liked this one! :)

Oh. And that person who said you should write something longer? Well, they're right.

[sinister-beauty.livejournal.com]

Wow. Really lyrical and beautiful but still intense in it's own way. Wonderful and very bitter.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

It was a bitter moment, I expect. Glad you liked the drabble! Thanks so much for commenting.

[elessil.livejournal.com]

Poor Jack.

Wonderful and touching little drabble.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[hendercats.livejournal.com]

a second later, a final glimmer from the depths.
Then gone, indeed.
Along with his plans and hopes and dreams.

Apparently Monday Morning Angst suits you quite well. Excellent look a what happened right after we leave that scene. Richly done and sad and beautiful.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Along with his plans and hopes and dreams.

Exactly. Poor Jack. *sheds a tear*

Glad you liked this, in spite of it being unusually angsty (for me).

[tseek-unique.livejournal.com]

Your drabbles ar such a treat. I love the angst here. Short but very effective. I can feel Jack's despair.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

That's the thing about Jack, isn't it-- he's comedy and tregedy, all rolled into one perfectly entertaining package.

Thanks so much for the comments. I'm glad you liked it.