Drabble Challenge: 'Drift'
Sep. 11th, 2005 01:32 amA double drabble written for the current challenge at Black Pearl Sails. Theme: 'Drift'.
He sat in a shadowed corner of the Black Dog Tavern, Port Royal, Jamaica, nursing his third grog.
The sidelong glances and furtive discussion had both diminished over the last two weeks. After the last hanging, he reckoned they’d cease entirely.
The last hanging. Jack Sparrow’s. Two mornings hence.
They tolerated him, but he was no longer one of them. He knew it. They knew it.
Oh, he still was, in fact, Brown’s apprentice. And his… regard for Miss Swann: that would never change, as long as he drew breath. But these facts that informed his life paled in the face of The Fact.
Pirate’s whelp.
He could hear him now…
Pirate is in your blood, boy, so you’ll have to square with that someday.
Jack.
Will drained his mug.
When he set it down again he was no longer alone.
“Gibbs!”
The man put a finger to his lips. “Hush, young Bootstrap.”
Will stiffened. “That… that’s not my name.”
“Is it not?”
Talk about a ‘sharp eye’…
“What do you want?” Will muttered.
Gibbs nodded. “I’ve a bit of a proposition for ye now, haven’t I?”
~.~
~ Spindrift ~
He sat in a shadowed corner of the Black Dog Tavern, Port Royal, Jamaica, nursing his third grog.
The sidelong glances and furtive discussion had both diminished over the last two weeks. After the last hanging, he reckoned they’d cease entirely.
The last hanging. Jack Sparrow’s. Two mornings hence.
They tolerated him, but he was no longer one of them. He knew it. They knew it.
Oh, he still was, in fact, Brown’s apprentice. And his… regard for Miss Swann: that would never change, as long as he drew breath. But these facts that informed his life paled in the face of The Fact.
Pirate’s whelp.
He could hear him now…
Pirate is in your blood, boy, so you’ll have to square with that someday.
Jack.
Will drained his mug.
When he set it down again he was no longer alone.
“Gibbs!”
The man put a finger to his lips. “Hush, young Bootstrap.”
Will stiffened. “That… that’s not my name.”
“Is it not?”
Talk about a ‘sharp eye’…
“What do you want?” Will muttered.
Gibbs nodded. “I’ve a bit of a proposition for ye now, haven’t I?”
~.~
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Date: 2005-09-11 01:56 am (UTC)You've drawn Will here perfectly. ANd Gibbs' voice! YAY!
This line, especially, packs a punch for me: Pirate’s whelp.
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Date: 2005-09-11 02:04 am (UTC)I've had it in mind to write a short story involving this gap in the movie for some time, although maybe just a double drabble will do...
So happy you liked it!
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Date: 2005-09-11 02:23 am (UTC)Seriously, "missing scene" stories are some of my very favorites. Please?
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Date: 2005-09-11 07:05 am (UTC)In the face of such kind entreaties (and knowing how my friend
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Date: 2005-09-11 11:16 am (UTC)"Rathole" has more of a sense of "sidetracked into a tangent issue that leads far away from the original issue, and make us wonder what were we talking about in the first place." I first heard is used here in the software industry, in reference to Bug Review Boards, where insignificant issues could take up the entire meeting hour, and little progress made on the major issues facing the software's development.
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Date: 2005-09-11 11:23 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2005-09-11 11:57 am (UTC)Ahahahaha. Notice how I messed up the html there in the comment above? I'm fine at night, but between the sun's rising and noon? Not so hot.
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Date: 2005-09-12 11:31 pm (UTC)Expand on this? Yes, please!!! :) Do it do it do it do it do it do it do it do it do it do it do it do it do it do it do it do it do it do it do it do it do it!!!! :)
Why yes, I did like this, why do you ask? :)
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Date: 2005-09-12 11:34 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2005-09-13 12:05 am (UTC)Don't answer that. :)
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Date: 2005-09-11 05:43 am (UTC)Ditto to Lin's request for a story.
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Date: 2005-09-11 07:10 am (UTC)After repeated viewings of the movie, it seems to me there was some sort of Plan afoot.
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Date: 2005-09-11 06:45 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2005-09-11 07:20 am (UTC)Glad you enjoyed this!
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Date: 2005-09-11 07:41 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2005-09-11 08:54 am (UTC)This is a gratifying sentiment, in spite of its dubious accuracy. Personally, I think the 'storm' is all yours -- you have given us an amazing wealth of excellent writing illuminating the PotC canon in an astoundingly short time. You are one of the most prolific writers in the fandom, and, as one of your happy readers, I can only say, "Well done! Keep up the good work!"
You had mentioned something about writing up some of that big gap at the end of the movie in some comment or other, I think. Not that there isn't room for more than one interpretation, but I didn't want to be working on something that would end up being redundant, you know?
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Date: 2005-09-11 09:13 am (UTC)That movie gap at the end is a wonderful space for the imagination. I keep inserting little bits and it gets more and more complicated. But your stories always have that little something in them that keeps me saying "MMmmmmm. I wish I had written that." Maybe if I make mention of other gaps in the movie on which I have designs, it will inspire your muse to produce more lovely little filler like this in the race for gaps? *Makes Shrek kitty eyes at geek mama's muse*
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Date: 2005-09-11 09:39 am (UTC)Your comment about writing a lot before getting up the nerve to post anything reminds me of me -- when I started writing Harry & the Pirate it was for my own enjoyment. I wasn't even planning on posting it. But then I had written so much of it, and had actually developed and outlined a plot for that and for Swann's Revenge, so I thought what the heck, it's as good as most of the stuff on ff.net: maybe someone else would enjoy it, too. Boy, that was terrifying, posting it for the first time. I posted the first 17 chapters all at once, and then the other ten within the next two weeks, and then I wrote and posted the twelve chapters of Swann's Revenge all within the next month. So yeah, everyone thought I was way speedy, too, where in reality it took me about three months to complete them, and that included the Thanksgiving holiday and the two weeks off at Christmas in which I did almost nothing but write. It's such huge fun, when you have the time to really get into it, as you know.
I've occasionally written gap-fillers, but nothing on the scale of yours, which are truly fascinating character studies and examinations of what might have been. But that gap at the end... that's really too big to ignore. And the angst inherant in those two weeks! Such drama. I'm usually more for the humor (as you know), but the whirlpool of emotion before the hanging would suck anyone in!
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Date: 2005-09-11 10:44 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2005-09-11 10:51 am (UTC)slavebeta. *bats Puss-In-Boots eyes*no subject
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Date: 2005-09-11 08:29 am (UTC)Well done!
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Date: 2005-09-11 09:01 am (UTC)Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Date: 2005-09-11 05:27 pm (UTC)*loves*
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Date: 2005-09-11 05:29 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2005-09-11 05:52 pm (UTC)As many other reviewers have said, I'd love to see a longer story here.
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Date: 2005-09-11 11:21 pm (UTC)That's what I think, too. And perhaps a longer story will soon be in the works.
Glad you liked this one. Thanks for letting me know!
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Date: 2005-09-12 03:50 am (UTC)*scurries to far side of room and puts in DVD ... watches hanging*
No, wonderful's not good enough ... it's perfect!
Armed with your idea of a single, connected Plan (as opposed to two "must do something" plans and a lot of coincidence), I see that when Will glances over his left shoulder, he could easily have been scanning for Parrot - had always presumed him to be looking at Elizabeth ('specially since we see her next) but your idea let me look at it with new eyes. And Norrington (could I really have missed this? or is it another case of just seeing differently?), hanging his head when Governor Swann reminds Elizabeth that they are all bound by the law.
The Fact.
Pirate's whelp.
Fabulous. And I adore his... regard for Miss Swann
Joins chorus: you really should go into this in more depth. Pretty please? I'll bake you cookies....
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Date: 2005-09-12 06:02 am (UTC)Mmmmm...cookies! Many, many thanks!
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Date: 2005-09-12 10:36 pm (UTC)I love Gibbs calling Will "young Bootstrap."
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Date: 2005-09-13 12:10 am (UTC)That's what I thought. And that the gap was pretty big in the movie -- a lot could have happened during that time.
I'm glad you liked this. :)
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Date: 2005-09-13 10:44 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2005-09-13 11:32 am (UTC)That's the way it looks to me, after repeated viewings of the scene. So, yes, I'm planning on doing a longer story, soon. Glad you liked the drabble!
Wondering if you'd be willing to beta a H&theP short story in a day or two? I'm almost finished with the draft...let me know, OK?
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Date: 2005-09-13 02:46 pm (UTC)Yes, of course, I'd love to, just send it over when you're done!