Two Drabbles

[dwgm]

While I was waiting THREE HOURS AT WALMART OMG to get a new car battery and oil change, I wrote a couple of drabbles, exactly a hundred words apiece, for this week's and last week's themes at Black Pearl Sails. hereswith is asleep, so these are unbetaed. But hey! A hundred words! What could go wrong?



Theme: Five

~ Bitter Harvest ~

"Five lashes be owed, I believe it is."

Years since he'd laid eyes on Will and now it came to this. A roar of despair escaped Bill as the Captain thrust the whip at him.

As well ask mercy of the sea.

"The cat's out of the bag, Mister Turner," Jones gloated. "Your issue will feel its sting, be it by the Bo'sun's hand, or your own."

He'd seen what the bo'sun could do to a man.

They stripped the shirt from Will's flawless back. Bill gathered himself, shuddering, and wondered at the efficacy of Jack's revenge, witting or no.

~.~







Theme: Slight


~ All of Them Are True ~

It was true Jack Sparrow had saved her life, but as Elizabeth watched Norrington's disdain and manhandling of her pirate, she thought the rest must have been exaggeration, if not outright lies. How could the slight, dripping, bedraggled figure before her be the hero of all those tales she loved? She was moved to defend the poor creature, berating both Norrington and her father on Sparrow’s behalf, but seemingly to no avail.

And then, in a flash, the chain was ‘round her neck, the breath of a feral yet melodious voice was in her ear, and she no longer doubted.


~.~

Comments

[honorat.livejournal.com]

Oooh. I get to be first. Love the idea that Bill sees Jack's delivery of Will to the Flying Dutchman as revenge--I never would have thought of that. *admires* What a twisty interweaving of love and betrayal and pain that whole set of relationships is!

And the second one is fun. Yes, Jack didn't look like much until he struck. Elizabeth has indeed found her pirate. Lovely use for a boring wait!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

You are indeed first!

What a twisty interweaving of love and betrayal and pain that whole set of relationships is!

So, so true. I think Bootstrap carries around a lot of guilt, what with one thing and another. And I don't doubt Jack knew what he was doing when he sent Will over to the Dutchman: Will would survive and succeed in getting the key, but perhaps not unscathed.

So happy you enjoyed these! Thank you for the quick feedback -- I really appreciate it.

[erinya.livejournal.com]

Ooh. I love both of these. But especially the contrasting descriptions of Jack in the second one, and Elizabeth's shifting views.

the slight, dripping, bedraggled figure before her

He is not a large man, is he? Especially surrounded by all those soldiers. A sparrow indeed.

the breath of a feral yet melodious voice was in her ear

*shiver* (the good kind, of course!)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you! It was an impressive beginning, and really, the whole beginning of that movie was just so much fun!

[torn-eledhwen.livejournal.com]

I love the second one in particular, but they're both great.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[komandant-krech.livejournal.com]

You are always so talented with drabbles! These were both lovely; I especially liked this in the latter one:

How could the slight, dripping, bedraggled figure before her be the hero of all those tales she loved?

Jack didn't look very legendary or intimidating at that very moment, that's true. Poor little bird... *pets*

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

Jack description is always fun, he's such a bundle of contrasts. I'm sure he'd enjoy the petting, just before he kissed your hand, grabbed his hat, and said, "Sorry, love, have to fly," as he escaped through the window. *g*

[fried-flamingo.livejournal.com]

Oh these are wonderful. I adore the idea that Will ending up aboard the Dutchman was somehow Jack's revenge on Bootstrap. Very original.

And as for the second, I think this just sums up Jack completely. Let them underestimate him until just the right moment ;)

*whispers* It's disdain btw :)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you! The revenge thing, I can see it being at the back of Jack's mind, though purer motives, like reuniting father and son, and saving his own skin, would be at the front.

So happy you enjoyed the second, too -- he really does know how to wait for the opportune moment.

And this is why I need a beta reader. Fixed! Thank you!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you! So happy you enjoyed them.

[sharklady35.livejournal.com]

Every comment I wanted to make about these has already been made, darn it.

So I'll just say, these solidify your reputation as the best PotC drabbler around.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked these. I do enjoy writing drabbles, and when I first joined BP Sails I thought I'd have a hard time writing anything that short. Just goes to show you.

[kseenaa.livejournal.com]

Oh, these were good. Really, really good. I love the look you have on Bill there. I do love the old man. Very, very nice.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Wow, I love your Bootstrap icon. Green really suits him! I'm so happy you enjoyed the drabbles. Thank you for letting me know!

[kseenaa.livejournal.com]

Thanx! :-D I am sniffing upp Bootstrap icons wherever I can find them. Not easy, let me tell you. ;-D You can snagg this if you wish. Very much sharable, just give credit to rlf_icons who made it. :-)

[hereswith.livejournal.com]

Yay for more drabbles from you! Just great, both of them, the idea of Jack's revenge in the first, and: As well ask mercy of the sea.. And Elizabeth's observations in the second, with the final line, in particular, I love that.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much!

Had to do SOMETHING while I was waiting for the car. They told me 45 minutes, originally -- if I'd known it was going to take that long I'd have had someone take me home -- or gone somewhere else. Grrrr. Anyway, at least it wasn't a complete waste of time.

I'm very happy you enjoyed these! And thank you again for writing A Lady and His Swain -- Mmmmmmm!!

[veronica-rich.livejournal.com]

wondered at the efficacy of Jack's revenge, witting or no

Jack does have a minor streak of cruelty in him. And people are shocked that Will attempted mutiny on him in AWE. *G*

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Certainly that wasn't Jack's finest moment.

And people are shocked that Will attempted mutiny on him in AWE.

Really? I thought the whole idea was that they were all turning more piratey as the story went along, and his mutiny would seem to go along with that idea. Jack didn't seem too upset about it, though he ensured that the manner of Will's arrival on Beckett's ship was less than comfortable. I think Jack has this idea that Turners are like cats: throw them any which way and they'll land on their feet, and distract the big dogs to boot. That's probably why Bootstrap didn't seem overly fond of Jack in their first scene in DMC -- I can imagine them having a number of hair raising adventures in their younger days.

Thanks for reading, and commenting!

[berne.livejournal.com]

Ooh, I especially like the second drabble. I have such a weakness for stories that tackle Elizabeth's expectations of Jack vs. her actual meeting him for the first time on the dock. You did it so well.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

I like that expectations vs. reality theme, too. So much more can be (and has been) written about that. I'm so happy you enjoyed this little sampling.

[immortal-jedi.livejournal.com]

those were lovely. I like Bill's thoughts in the first one. I never thought that Jack tricking Will onto the Dutchman might be revenge on Bill.

The second one, too, was different. You never think of Jack as a "poor creature" after he escapes, you know. Just like Elizabeth

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Aaaah! That great icon again! Love that one. I may have to pirate it. ;)

I don't think revenge was Jack's foremost thought, certainly, which is why I included "witting or no" at the end, but I think Bill carries around a lot of guilt and that's what he'd think.

Glad you liked these. It was fun getting them down to hundred word drabbles.

[lady-di75.livejournal.com]

And then, in a flash, the chain was ‘round her neck, the breath of a feral yet melodious voice was in her ear, and she no longer doubted.... and lo, there was Sparrabeth, and it was good...

I am always delighted at the pixie dust you sprinkle in just a few words... these were both such clear snapshots of key moments, and your spin on them is striking.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! I'm very glad you enjoyed them. :))

[captaintish]

These are both excellent.

And then, in a flash, the chain was ‘round her neck, the breath of a feral yet melodious voice was in her ear, and she no longer doubted.

I love that line. I'd like to see your take on more of the Jack/Elizabeth interaction in the first movie.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I might just take you up on that last suggestion. It's an interesting dynamic between them.

[captaintish]

I might just take you up on that last suggestion.

I hope you do!

[obfusc8er.livejournal.com]

Very nice. Thank you, Walmart. *g*

As well ask mercy of the sea.

Hm. I know this fic focuses more on Bill and Will, but this line says a lot about Davy and Calypso and, well, life in general.

Elizabeth watched Norrington's disdain and manhandling of her pirate

Hehe. Her pirate.

Jack really knows how to work people. Elizabeth learned from the best.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked these. Walmart is good for something, at least. *g*

All true

[pearlseed.livejournal.com]

I have adored from the first second (now that's interesting?) the dock scene--your other one about the wooden sword drew me to you and I fell in love. I have always felt the scene you described with such economy and grace here was SEXY/hot and too fine. Boy, I can just see Miz Elisabeth's mind in overdrive, processing and so very sure of her bad young self, til...she finds out what a wolf of a man exists in Jack--her heart's pounding triphammers to my way of thinking. She doesn't just know it from her eyebrows up in her well-read, well-bred mind, she knows it now in the blood rushing merrily through her heart! Capt'n Jack Sparrow, she knows now, is the real deal pirate and how furious she is to have learned this at such a price. Damn, chile, you are good!!!

Re: All true

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

I think we were all blown away by those opening scenes of Jack in CotBP -- rarely does a character grab you like that, right from th start. Fabulous introduction to the wily and beautiful Captain Sparrow.

Thank you so much for reading and commenting -- I'm so glad you enjoyed!