Drabble for the 'Glimpse' Challenge

[dwgm]

Better late than never. Still working on the 'Discuss' theme.

150 unbetaed words of mid-CotBP.



That Glimpse of Ankle

She was different, Elizabeth was. Bloody Miss Swann. So full of romantical pirate tales, so sure of herself, even after repeated and undeniably unpleasant encounters with Barbossa and his gaggle of miscreants. Jack's blood ran cold, remembering her shrieks as they'd laid rough hands upon her, before Will had shown up. Could've been a bad business. She'd done all right, though. Even made that long swim to shore without much help from him.

The Pearl was a dot on the horizon now. Jack's blood ran both cold and hot at that, and he continued cleaning his pistol with special care. But he had to admit, the sight of Miss Swann approaching, barefoot in the sand, her shift gathered out of the way just enough to afford him a glimpse of strong, shapely ankle, did much to improve the outlook.

Rum and Miss Elizabeth Swann. At least he wouldn't be bored.


~.~

Comments

[tiamary.livejournal.com]

Boy, you really captured the mood, feel, and voice of the first film in a way I don't often see. This might be my favorite work of yours!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much!

[artaxastra.livejournal.com]

That's our Jack. A silver lining in every cloud!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

That's the other reason we love him. *g*

[sharklady35.livejournal.com]

Very nice summary! I really wish they'd included that scene in the theatrical release.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thanks! And yes, those deleted scenes added so much to the story and characterizations.

[sunshine304]

Very nice, indeed! As always you captured Jack perfectly!

I really have to catch up with my flist. You've written so many one shots over the last few weeks, and recced so many goodfic. *sigh* At the moment I'm just saving everything that's a bit longer to read it later...

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

I'm way behind in reading, too -- and I have a couple of things to edit, and things I want to write myself. There are just not enough hours in the day.

One nice thing about drabbles is that they're short and sweet, so there's usually time for them. I'm so glad you enjoyed this one! Thank you for letting me know.

[this-weirdness.livejournal.com]

Enjoyed this very much... Perfect Jack - a good man, concerned for Elizabeth, and, of course, a pirate! ;)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you! The first picture that came to mind when I read the drabble theme was that shot of her ankles as she's walking along the beach, and I figured Jack would have noticed, too.

[kseenaa.livejournal.com]

Well, at least not that Jack. But you'll lose the rum. *smirk* Wellwritten! :-D

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Yes, little did he know just how not bored he would be. *G*

Thank you! I'm so happy you liked this.

[faeriquene.livejournal.com]

Ooh, lovely! Don't see much from the first film these days - a nice reminder of that delicious beach scene.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you! The dynamic between the characters was so different in the first movie. You really had to read between the lines to see the J/E.

[felaine.livejournal.com]

We all know a bored Jack is trouble for everyone.
Good work.

Where are the eggs? ;)
Felaine

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you. Eggs are boiling, and pics of the coloring set are here!

[captaintish]

Nice drabble. Takes me back to the day of the first movie. More please!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

More?! OK.

Thank you -- I'm glad you liked this!

[lady-di75.livejournal.com]

A lovely bit of something for my sweet tooth :) Amazing how the little, 'in-between' scene drabbles sometimes ring the most true, and necessary.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Amazing how the little, 'in-between' scene drabbles sometimes ring the most true, and necessary.

Fanfiction is so wonderful, satisfying our craving for more -- more explanation, more words, more scenes, more of everything we love about canon.

Thank you for letting me know you liked this little bit. :)

[honorat.livejournal.com]

Ah! Island fic from you. *cuddles up with old-fashioned CotBP warm-fuzzies* I do have a soft spot for those deleted island scenes as you might remember :D

And I love the description of Kiera/Elizabeth's ankles, because they are just that! Good old Jack. Always on the lookout for the shiny.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

I do have a soft spot for those deleted island scenes as you might remember :D

I do indeed remember. Beautiful work, is Marooned. I'm glad you enjoyed this little snippet of Jack's thoughts.

And blessings to you and your family tomorrow, and every day!

[honorat.livejournal.com]

And blessings to you and your family tomorrow, and every day!

And to you and yours the same! Happy Easter.

[florencia7.livejournal.com]

I just LOVED it! Wonderful drabble. It felt as if it was written by Jack:)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

What a great compliment! Thank you very much.

[hereswith.livejournal.com]

Love it! Sounds very Jack, did much to improve the outlook, indeed, and the last two lines are perfect. Definitely not bored ;-) You write him so well, and like others have mentioned above, it's very nice to return for a moment to the CotBP days.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I, too, enjoy a return to those simpler CotBP days (although at the time I thought Elizabeth very silly for preferring Will to Jack). I'm so happy you enjoyed this!