Drabble Series: 'An Execrable Business', continued... (11/?)

[dwgm]

Back to work today. Happy Inauguration Day to Us All!

And with the latter in mind, I'm posting early today. 500 more words of the story, by the light of the 'Moon'. Thanks again to hereswith for the beta read.

1. Tortuga
2. Happiness
3. Festive
4. Last Minute
5. Calm
6. Truth
7. Bargain
8. Spook
9. Down
10. Wounds
11. Moon


~ An Execrable Business, continued...

He set her on her feet – foot – when they reached the door and she willed her cheeks to cool while he looked for the key. How disconcerting to be carried like that!

“It’s here, somewhere,” he muttered, feeling along the top edge of the doorjamb. “Ah! Success!”

He held up the key and his teasing wink set her blushing once more. Oh, he was dangerous, she was drawn to him like a moth to the flame! He turned to unlock the door and she scowled at his back, sternly berating herself. Then he got the door open and stood aside to let her pass.

“Milady?” he said, sweeping his arm in a welcoming gesture.

Good heavens.

“You are dreadful!” she exclaimed, in a low, embarrassing burst of candor, and was further mortified when he agreed.

“I know precisely what you mean, love. You’re rather dreadful yourself. Nothing for it, however. We must gird our loins. As it were. Come. Inside, tout de suite.”

She limped past him and found herself in a hallway that ran toward the front of the house. Jack entered behind her, closed the door, and locked it again. They weren’t quite plunged into darkness, for the full moon shone through the windows, in the rooms on either side and the one in the door.

“We'd best not use a lamp, might attract undesirable attention. Sit down on this bench—“

She did, perforce.

“—and I’ll go look around.”

“Are you sure we should be here? Your friend won’t mind?”

“Mind? Not at all. She's true blue, is Sally.”

He ambled off, disappearing from sight, though she could still hear him as he moved about, his bootsteps on the polished wood floors and the staircase, and once a small crash and the sound of glass breaking, followed by indistinct cursing.

She turned and rested her throbbing foot and ankle upon the bench beside her. The pain gradually faded, but as it did so the indigestion engendered by their mad escape became all the more noticeable. She leaned against the wall, tired and thirsty, slightly sick, and wondering why she wasn't more worried.

Eventually Jack returned. “You'd like our hostess's rooms, I daresay. Quite resplendent. But they're upstairs. Might prove difficult for your foot—or my back, if I carried you. We'll stay down here, in the housekeeper's room, just off the kitchen. We can have a nice tot of her brandy, for medicinal purposes, and get some shuteye. Come, up you go.”

He took her hands and helped her to her feet. Impulsively, she clutched his fingers. “I’m sorry I said you were dreadful. It’s me, not you. I’m so very much—”

“Such honesty! Most ill-advised." He kissed her knuckles, then said, amused and seductive, "I reckon it’s both of us, love. But tonight, at least, you'll remain unravished.”

She couldn't help smiling. "Are you tempted? I am most unravishing at present."

His teeth shown white in the gloom. “Very true. But tomorrow's another day.”



TBC…

Comments

[sequence-fairy.livejournal.com]

Ooooh....I've been loving these little snippets, they are quite enjoyable! I love the last bit of this one though...

"Are you tempted?" Of course he is...you're female...*laughs*

Thank you for a smile this morning!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

You're very welcome! I'm glad to know you've been enjoying it!!

[mindyracal.livejournal.com]

*gape-jawed*

I have a feeling this might not go so well....but I could be dead wrong....lol

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Well, you will note the title. *g* And Jack's plans have a way of going awry. I'm glad you're enjoying it!!

[jillianfish.livejournal.com]

He's Jack! Of course he's tempted. Even more so because Nell is a tough cookie and so very intriguing.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Jack never met a temptation he didn't like. *g*

Glad you're enjoying!

[stealmybike.livejournal.com]

A moment of tranquility for our pair here. Always love how Jack knows the ins and outs of places when it comes to these sorts of situations.

This line was so Jack: “I know precisely what you mean, love. You’re rather dreadful yourself. Nothing for it, however. We must gird our loins. As it were. Come. Inside, tout de suite.”

Along with this: a small crash and the sound of glass breaking, followed by indistinct cursing. - I can so see Jack bumping into things around the house. Little actions like that really brings him to life in this.

Very cute ending between the pair in this segment. Looking forward to more :)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad you thought Jack was Jackish in this -- I can just see him doing some of this stuff. Thank you for the detailed comments -- it's so valuable to know what works!

[aravah.livejournal.com]

LOL! The fangirl in me is on the rampage again, but I'll say no more on that count! ;)

Still great... still looking forward to more. :)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

So happy your inner fangirl is having a good time here! More tomorrow -- and thank you for reading and commenting!

[p0wdermonkey.livejournal.com]

I just read myself up to date. I love these. Jack is adorable. Hope you'll post them altogether somewhere when you're done. It'd be good to read through without clicking around.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much for your comments and suggestion! That's a good idea, maybe I'll post it in several bigger parts on different comms later. I'm so glad you like it so far.

[ladymora.livejournal.com]

“I know precisely what you mean, love. You’re rather dreadful yourself. Nothing for it, however. We must gird our loins. As it were. Come. Inside, tout de suite.”

I laughed out loud! Such perfect Jack.

I need to gird my loins more. I think I shall add that to my common phrases, at least in the SCA. :)

SO enjoying this story.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

That's a great phrase, isn't it? I am always so happy when I see a comment from you. I really appreciate you taking the time to do that.

*big Papagena hugs*

[florencia7.livejournal.com]

"“Milady?” he said, sweeping his arm in a welcoming gesture. / Good heavens. / “You are dreadful!” she exclaimed, in a low, embarrassing burst of candor, and was further mortified when he agreed." - This is so craftily written! I love it.

And the ending!! You convey their mutual attraction so well, in such a subtle, clever way. It's a JOY to read.

Can't wait for more - as always! :)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Oh, thank you! I'm so glad you're enjoying it! More tomorrow. :)

[pearlseed.livejournal.com]

Well, now that's a helluva note, innit? She is skating on thin ice to play against Captain Jack Sparrow.

“I know precisely what you mean, love. You’re rather dreadful yourself. We must gird our loins. As it were." I find him to be so attractive when he's just being him own flirty self. Or anything.

“Such honesty! Most ill-advised." Most assuredly sounds just like himself. Lawd, what a character he can be (interpreted). Thanks so much for your delightful little bonbons (a la Depp).

Also, had to share my original finding on the title--really helps if you can spell what you are looking for! Never really figured you for a spittin' kinda gal--imagine my shock twice--first def, then when I found out I couldn't spell for beans!
excreable--Capable of being discharged by spitting. [Obs.] --Swift. OH, execreable.....so near, so far.LOL at my ownself.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Oops, yes, I had to check the spelling on it, and actually wasn't aware of the word execreable, which is very close, I have to say. *g*

But no, it's execrable as in detestable or Baaaaad!!! So appropriate, I thought. *g*

His own flirty self, yes. I think he can't help flirting, it's his nature. *g*

I'm so glad you liked the Jackish repartee -- it's awfully fun to write, too.

Thank you for commenting -- twice!

[mary684.livejournal.com]

You've got Jack talking in your head, doncha? It's a fine thing when that happens, isn't it? And most likely he can't shut up so this will carry on for another week or so, at least. I'm thrilled!
But tonight, at least, you'll remain unravished.”

..."Are you tempted? I am most unravishing at present."

...“Very true. But tomorrow's another day.”

Nothing more to say. Just very happy at how this progresses. *pets flirty!Jack*

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

I'm glad you're having fun reading. Yes, Jack, once he starts talking, is difficult to shut up. And I'm afraid it may take more than a week to wrap up. I know the ending, and the basic plot of the middle, but getting from here to there may be somewhat convoluted. I keep thinking of stuff I want to throw in there. *g*

Thank you for reading and commenting!!

[mary684.livejournal.com]

Oh, by all means, take many, many weeks to tie this all up.

[kseenaa.livejournal.com]

I like there little bickering they got going. Most entertaining. :-D

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Must have some bickering. Jack would be disappointed else. ;)

[compassrose7577.livejournal.com]

Going to try to catch up (FINALLY!!!!!), but holy cats!! You've been having a gang old time with this one.

It's fun to see someone hit their stride and really have fun with something. What an incredible concept..... and hark, do I see an OC?????

I know before I go any further this is gonna be good. I'm in great need of some greatness.

Off to read!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

You know how I like the OC's just like you do, and yes, I've been having a good time with it! I hope you have a good time with it -- that's the whole point, after all. I figured we all needed something cheery to ease the post-holiday blues. And thank you for reading and commenting! I appreciate it very much.