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Many thanks to [livejournal.com profile] hereswith for burning the midnight oil to look this over for me. 100 words of smitten Will at the beginning of CotBP, written for the current challenge at [livejournal.com profile] potc100...



~ Worship ~


Folded steel… gold filigree laid into the handle… perfectly balanced…

And then she had come down the stairs. Tall and slender, a vision in satin and lace… the goddess of his idolatry.

She had dreamed of him. Asked him again, before her father, to use her Christian name – and her displeasure at his refusal to do so had nearly broken him.

That moment of pique was fitting in one so high-spirited. Surely she would understand, when she had considered.

He had no right. He was not of the same cloth. He was not worthy of one who was perfection itself.


~.~

Date: 2010-01-06 05:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pearlseed.livejournal.com
Oh boy oh boy oh boy--more words! And wonderful words about the sword and the girl, beautiful and imperial and brave, from himself, the one with the touch of destiny! Oh, yes, perfection just begins to cover it.

Matter of respect, innit--even when it would have been a delicious gift for him to have given.

Date: 2010-01-06 05:49 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Will by wapiti_baris)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
She's always perfect for him. That touch of destiny, yes. Thank you for the feedback -- I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Date: 2010-01-06 11:22 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] florencia7.livejournal.com
Wonderful take on that scene. So Will, so true!

Date: 2010-01-06 04:12 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Will - Pirate by ashleygaea)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
He always seems so overwhelmed by her in that scene. I could see him thinking this. Thank you for the feedback!

Date: 2010-01-06 11:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amenirdis.livejournal.com
Oh Will!

I love the comparison between Elizabeth and the sword -- beautiful and apt, in light of where she and the sword are both going.

Date: 2010-01-06 04:17 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Will Serious by ambayuun)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Re: Elizabeth and the sword - yes! I'd thought of that myself. There are at least another couple of drabbles that could be written, I think. Thank you very much for the feedback!

Date: 2010-01-06 02:55 pm (UTC)

Date: 2010-01-06 04:28 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Will Swimming by ambayuun)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2010-01-06 03:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sharklady35.livejournal.com
Oh yes you are worthy, Will Turner! Someday everybody shall know that.

Date: 2010-01-06 04:28 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Will Serious by ambayuun)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
He really grows so much through the movies, but yes, he was always worthy.

Date: 2010-01-06 03:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] veronica-rich.livejournal.com
This is very fitting for Early Will in the movies. (I was much happier with AWE, when he'd finally seen her for the regular flawed person she is and not only still loved her, but was willing to let her go if need be, AND follow her command.)

I know this is well written because I have the same reaction reading it that I had watching the scene in CotBP - Get down off the cross, Will, somebody else needs the wood! :-)

Date: 2010-01-06 04:25 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Will Swimming by ambayuun)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Yes, he just looks so overwhelmed by her, and so young in that scene, he's really adorable. They both learn an awful lot over the course of the movies. Thank you so much for the feedback -- I'm glad you thought it worked.

Date: 2010-01-06 04:09 pm (UTC)
ext_299956: (Default)
From: [identity profile] orpsgod.livejournal.com
Nice insight into his thoughts at that point in time. Thank you for posting. :)

Date: 2010-01-06 04:26 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Will Swimming by ambayuun)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you for the feedback -- I'm glad you liked it. :)

Praise from Willofthewisp

Date: 2010-01-07 01:41 am (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
Oh dear. Poor Will. There is such a thing as too much adoration, as this has clearly taught him. It's going to have to take something major like Elizabeth being kidnapped by pirates to get his mindset to change somewhat.

You've hit the nail on the head when it comes to Will in his introductory scene. Rifftrax burns him shamelessly ("would you like some dignity, sir?"), but it's just a guy tongue-tied by the girl who is so out of his league. The logic behind his refusal to call her Elizabeth is so in-character. Great job.

Re: Praise from Willofthewisp

Date: 2010-01-07 03:03 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Will Serious by ambayuun)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you! That scene is always striking to me, he looks so young and awkward, and really that's the only time he does, in the next scene we see him confident in his anger at Jack and his ability as a swordsman.

did someone say Rifftrax?

Date: 2010-01-08 03:54 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] veronica-rich.livejournal.com
I rather enjoyed the eunuch jokes throughout.

"Oh, sure, rub it in - just because you have male genitalia."

And my favorite, when Will comes into the smithy: "But why is the lusty pirate hiding from the beautiful girl?"

Re: did someone say Rifftrax?

Date: 2010-01-11 07:07 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Will Swimming by ambayuun)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
I need to get me some pirate Rifftrax.

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