Another Piratey Drabble...

[dwgm]

Wrote this for last week's drabble challenge at Black Pearl Sails--got it posted in the nick of time!

Parry and Riposte

The rhythmic clash of steel on steel rang through the morning air as the combatants strove with deadly grace. The breeze was feather light and the witnesses hushed; even, heavy breathing was audible, along with the pad and scrape of practiced booted feet. Blue skies and shadowed sails wheeled overhead.

Evenly matched, ultimately it was knowledge of the surroundings that tipped the scales. A misfortunate heel caught against an obstruction, an oath sounded, and the foe thudded to the sun-hammered deck.

"There now," Jack gasped, eyes alight, offering the Commodore a hand, "Y'satisfied it ain't made o' wood?"


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Comments

[lj_stowaway]

Hee! Cute!

Yet another irritation. Jack will ever be a thorn in Norrington's side, won't he?

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Jack will ever be a thorn in Norrington's side, won't he?

I think it would always be a love/hate relationship. I'm glad you liked it!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thanks! So happy you enjoyed.

[jenthegypsy.livejournal.com]

So, the Commodore is taking a 'time out' aboard the Pearl I see.... Squeeee! Committed to Memories without a second thought. Love this audio-image (is there such a thing?) "...the pad and scrape of practiced booted feet." :-D

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thanks -- so happy to have produced a "Squeeee!" And yes, I think audio-image is a great descriptor.

[hereswith.livejournal.com]

Lovely work, as always :-) There's a nice rhythm to it and I especially like the: blue skies and shadowed sails wheeled overhead and the foe thudded to the sun-hammered deck.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

The first phrase is mine, but I have to admit that "sun-hammered deck" was a birthday gift from viva_gloria, a wordsmith of great excellence. I'm glad you enjoyed the drabble. :)

[the-dala.livejournal.com]

*snicker*

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Hee!

[hippediva.livejournal.com]

Ah but what is made of wood, indeed? *G* Lovely work! Brava!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Ah but what is made of wood, indeed?

I knew someone would give it that interpretation. ;)

Glad you enjoyed it!

[porridgebird.livejournal.com]

Beautiful :))

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

[elessil.livejournal.com]

Mmmm. James and Jack swordfighting. Very pretty, and in a beautiful imagery!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Pretty, indeed! Thank you.

[tiggothy.livejournal.com]

Mmmm.... *drools* pretteh swordfight :-)

Thanks for sharing - as always, fantastic writing :-)

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it.

[shyaway.livejournal.com]

That's great!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

[torn-eledhwen.livejournal.com]

Excellent drabble!

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[guanin.livejournal.com]

Really nice. I like how you manage to put everything in so few words.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I managed to keep this one to a hundred words for once -- rather unusual, lately.

[tseek-unique.livejournal.com]

Hee! At last, Jack puts commodore in his proper place. I found this fun to read, bright, cleverly worded, and it left me with a smile at the end! Thanks for sharing.

[geekmama.livejournal.com]

You're welcome--thanks for commenting!

Hee! At last, Jack puts commodore in his proper place.

That's what I thought, too!