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This is another prequel to A Word In Private, occuring just previous to that one on the timeline. Many thanks to [livejournal.com profile] hereswith for editing. Actually, now that I think about it, this one could be another reply to the Black Pearl Sails drabble challenge for this week ('First Day').




~ A Fine Day ~



Jack and His Pearl.

The Pearl and Her Rightful Captain.

Captain Jack Sparrow and His Ship, the Black Pearl.

These, and similar phrases, weave a constant harmony through his thoughts, like a hymn (or p’rhaps the humming of a lunatic), though outwardly he’s possessed of a sangfroid that can only be considered remarkable in one who’d stood upon the scaffold mere hours before.

Staring down Death, with laughter on his lips (of which the crowd had been appreciative, even if the hangman had not).

Praying that his last moments would do little to sully The Legend.

Those last moments, as they’d ultimately played out, run over and over in his mind (between the humming) and, though he takes himself to task for dwelling on such useless and, indeed, damaging thoughts, he has to acknowledge that the particular nature of the Opportune Moment provided by Providence that morning was sufficient to give any mortal a lasting turn. He’s not just any mortal, of course; still, mortal he is, with a mortal’s natural reluctance to shuffling off the proverbial coil, so it’s perhaps understandable that the events of those moments – The Sudden Realization That Something Was Happening, rapidly succeeded by The Trap Springing, The Sickening Fall, The Noose Tightening, The Painful Inability to Breathe, and The Desperate Scrabbling For Purchase – had quite electrified him with terror at the time.

Actually, he’s thankful he hadn’t pissed himself.

He had not, however, and his subsequent Escape (in which William had once again proven himself the progeny of Bootstrap: Good Man, Good Pirate, Bloody Pig-headed), including his daring leap into the arms of the sea (yes, he’d meant to do that, in spite of appearances), had been fabulous enough to provide fodder for many a popular ballad and song in years to come.

Entirely in keeping with The Legend.

The euphoria’s been his constant companion for hours, lending him an energy and a clarity of thought beyond the ken of ordinary men (and women: Anamaria’s been eyeing him askance for some time now). His hands on the wheel of his ship – his ship! – provide the last link in the chain, the means by which she communicates her joy to him, and makes him whole, and he does not want to give that up, wants it to last and last and last: his ship, Jack and His Ship, sailing into the setting sun, and on and ever on as night closes over the two of them; on and further on, under the wheeling stars.

Captain Jack Sparrow of the Black Pearl.

However, he has to admit that, though the spirit is willing as it’s ever been since he first drew breath in that thatched cottage back in Kent, the flesh has a somewhat different opinion of the matter.

When was the last time he’d slept? Not the night before, certainly. He’d set it aside as a waste of precious time, and instead had centered himself in watching the Sea: Norrington had given him that, at least, as well as that promise he’d end there, rather than Deadman’s Cay.

He smiles at the manner in which that promise is now fulfilled, and grips the spokes of the Pearl’s wheel tighter, absorbing her strength and beauty, fending off weariness and the need to eat and sleep (perchance to dream).

Besides – and he barely allows his mind to light on the subject – there’s the matter of his cabin. Ten years of Barbossa’s left an impression, and he’ll lay it’ll take some time before that’s remedied.

His smile fades, and he pushes that thought away, too.

His Pearl.

So when Ana tries again, an hour into the dog watch, mouth and eyes narrowed, he flashes as lucid a smile as he can muster and tells her, “No! No. Just a bit longer, eh? It’s been a long time for us, the Pearl an’ me. Just a bit longer, there’s a love. I’m fine. Really. I’m fine.”


~.~

Date: 2005-10-02 05:25 pm (UTC)
ext_7904: (POTC-jack-dance)
From: [identity profile] porridgebird.livejournal.com
Oh, how perfect! And so beautifully written; it reads like poetry.

I'm really enjoying these, thanks! :)

Date: 2005-10-02 05:28 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (One Eyed Jack by inevendim)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
So very happy you liked it! There will very likely be more coming. ;)

Date: 2005-10-02 05:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] honorat.livejournal.com
Tres magnifique! The first three lines I got the picture of a young girl scribbling her name with the name of her beau on her notebook :D Jack, trying their names out together agains. Aww.

Jack's memories of the hanging are such a mixture of bravado and terror. Gallows humour indeed. Very believable.

Actually, he’s thankful he hadn’t pissed himself. And so he should be!

Good Man, Good Pirate, Bloody Pig-headed *Snerk* That's our Will. And of course Jack meant that tilt over the edge. I've always thought so.

However, he has to admit that, though the spirit is willing . . . the flesh has a somewhat different opinion of the matter. I like the contrast you build between the Legend and the man. Jack's hardest job--living up to himself. And of course the language of Shakespeare and the Bible throughout is both period accurate and fitting for a legend.

perchance to dream Ah yes, "what dreams may come . . . must give us pause." If anyone has spent a day bearing the "slings and arrows of outrageous fortune," it's Jack. I like your picture of Jack just barely holding on to his courage and his front with both hands. Looking insouciant, but fraying inside. Poor Jack. What a day. It will take some time.

Loved this. Saved it.




Date: 2005-10-02 08:06 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (One Eyed Jack by inevendim)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Poor Jack. What a day. It will take some time.

I would think so, even for Captain Jack Sparrow.

Thanks so much for the detailed feedback! It's so good to knnow what worked, and that you enjoyed some of the same lines and phrases that I liked best, too. So happy you liked it enough to save, too!

Date: 2005-10-02 06:33 pm (UTC)
ext_15529: made by jazsekuhsjunk (deppified - wings)
From: [identity profile] the-dala.livejournal.com
Zzzzzzzzzz.

(that's Jack having fallen asleep at the wheel)

Hmmm-hmmm hm-hm-hm-hmmm, hm-hmm-hmm-hmmmmm...

(that's Anamaria humming as she nudges him over on the deck and takes the helm)

HUZZAH!

(that's Dala in praise of the brilliant character study)

Date: 2005-10-02 07:36 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Sparrow Sleeping by inevendim)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
LOL! Poor Jack. He had quite a day there, didn't he? I'm glad you enjoyed this, my dear. ;)

Date: 2005-10-02 07:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cacopheny.livejournal.com
Your use of capitol letters so totally works. I love it.

Date: 2005-10-02 08:11 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (One Eyed Jack by inevendim)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thanks, sweetie! So happy you are reading! I think the capitals are particularly appropriate for Sparrow's train of thought. ;)

Date: 2005-10-02 10:03 pm (UTC)
lj_stowaway: (dreaming)
From: [personal profile] lj_stowaway
N'awwwwwww. I love this! I can just see it, too. Funny and bittersweet follow-on from my favorite scene in the movie.

Date: 2005-10-02 10:17 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (One Eyed Jack by inevendim)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thanks--I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

Date: 2005-10-03 12:44 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] torn-eledhwen.livejournal.com
Very Jack ficlet. Loved it!

Date: 2005-10-03 05:49 am (UTC)

Date: 2005-10-03 02:23 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] galadhir.livejournal.com
LOL! I loved the 18th Century Style and Capitalizations; the feeling of joyful euphoria really comes through. Lovely!

Date: 2005-10-03 05:52 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (One Eyed Jack by inevendim)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Jack must think in capitals, no? So happy the piece worked the way I was hoping. Many thanks!

Date: 2005-10-03 03:55 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hendercats.livejournal.com
What a delightful thing to find early on a Monday morning!

I love the happy Pearl-thoughts skittering wildly through his brain, even as you recount the morning's events. And am glad you had the crowd appreciate his laughter over the cleric impersonation charge, for of course they would have (even though Disneyness had them be quite subdued).

Absolute favorite bit:
Praying that his last moments would do little to sully The Legend.

And hooray for your Norrington and his willingness to be flexible within the constraints he's under.

And babble babble, wonderful, babble babble, fangirl squeal, babble babble babble.
*saves to memories*

Date: 2005-10-03 06:03 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (One Eyed Jack by inevendim)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Disneyness had them be quite subdued

They were, weren't they? But I couldn't resist putting that in, since it seemed right, as did Norrington's bit.

So happy this inspired a "fangirl squeal", and that you enjoyed it enough to save! Thanks for letting me know. ;)

Date: 2005-10-03 10:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shyaway.livejournal.com
LOVE.

I really like how you paint Jack in this: all remarkable sangfroid and daring escapes (fabulous enough to provide fodder for many a popular ballad and song in years to come) on the outside, not quite as tough as he'd like everyone to believe on the inside ... Praying that his last moments would do little to sully The Legend, He’s not just any mortal, of course; still, mortal he is, with a mortal’s natural reluctance to shuffling off the proverbial coil, the flesh has a somewhat different opinion of the matter...

Norrington having promised to bury him at sea is a nice touch.

And I adore these lines ... Jack and His Ship, sailing into the setting sun, and on and ever on as night closes over the two of them; on and further on, under the wheeling stars, absorbing her strength and beauty and It’s been a long time for us, the Pearl an’ me. Just a bit longer.

Memorying, printing, and generally admiring. <3

Date: 2005-10-03 10:40 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (One Eyed Jack by inevendim)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
I think appearances are everything with Jack, and he wouldn't let down his guard unless he absolutely couldn't help it. I may have to write the Norrington scene. Oh, the angst!

So happy you liked it that much!! Thank you for telling me. :)

Date: 2005-10-03 11:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rennie1265.livejournal.com
Yes, please, please write the Norrington scene. You can't just leave us hanging! Overall, a very nice feel to this piece, the bitter and the sweet together give it depths it wouldn't have otherwise. Jack's like quicksilver in his thoughts, no?

Date: 2005-10-04 04:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shyaway.livejournal.com
appearances are everything with Jack, and he wouldn't let down his guard unless he absolutely couldn't help it.

I agree with that. It's fundamental to his character, so much so that he won't even say something as innocuous as "thank you" to Will ...

I may have to write the Norrington scene.

Sounds good!

Date: 2005-10-03 12:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] berne.livejournal.com
Whee, another one!

...weave a constant harmony through his thoughts, like a hymn (or p’rhaps the humming of a lunatic)

Oooh, lovely.

...was sufficient to give any mortal a lasting turn.

You know, I've always wanted to read a fic about the immediate effects of Jack's almost-hanging. The "had quite electrified him with terror at the time" is perfect.

Anamaria’s been eyeing him askance for some time now

*laughs* She would do!

Captain Jack Sparrow of the Black Pearl.

Love how he keeps resserting that to himself. Quite heartbreaking, really.

“No! No. Just a bit longer, eh? It’s been a long time for us, the Pearl an’ me. Just a bit longer, there’s a love. I’m fine. Really. I’m fine.”

*loves Jack* *loves this universe* Another for the memories.

Date: 2005-10-03 01:01 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (One Eyed Jack by inevendim)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
'Captain Jack Sparrow of the Black Pearl.'

Love how he keeps resserting that to himself. Quite heartbreaking, really.


It's quite a turnaround for him, isn't it? He's a master at rolling with the punches, but after a day like that I'd think even Jack would be thrown for a loop, though of course he would do everything in his power to hide the fact -- would barely admit it even to himself.

So happy you liked this! Thanks so much for the detailed feedback -- it's so very much appreciated.

Date: 2005-10-03 03:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cymbeline.livejournal.com
Actually, he’s thankful he hadn’t pissed himself. *sporfle*

I like how he keeps himself in the present to fully grasp that he is truly the Captain once again.

Date: 2005-10-03 04:01 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (One Eyed Jack by inevendim)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
I thought the present tense was really appropriate for this. It's only the second time I've used it, and I'm glad it seemed to work. Thanks for commenting!

Date: 2005-10-03 03:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hereswith.livejournal.com
As I've said, I love the rhythm of this, the almost singsong tone of it, it's beautiful and it feels very Jack to me. And I still adore both under the wheeling stars and perchance to dream :-)

*adds to memories*

Date: 2005-10-03 04:19 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (One Eyed Jack by inevendim)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Oooh, icon!! Rather beautifully intense!

I think Jack's train of thought would have something of that sort of bardic resonance to it. And besides, I had been reading Impverse 'sentences', which have a sort of singsongy/poetic feel to them. Can't seem to help stealing from other authors absorbing what I read, to some extent.

So happy you liked it! Thanks so much, again, for doing your usual wonderful job of editing. :)



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Date: 2005-10-05 06:52 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Horizon by leblacklabel)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thankee, ma'am. Jack/Pearl was just what I had in mind. Glad you feel it worked.

Date: 2005-10-07 03:16 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jenthegypsy.livejournal.com
Again, just wonderful - love this train of ficlets. I'll stay on to the end of the line, if you please! ;-)

(Abnormal brevity of comments due to AbbieNormal quantity of things not read, or noted...still. sigh

Date: 2005-10-07 09:48 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (One Eyed Jack by inevendim)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
So happy you enjoyed this one, Jen. Thanks for letting me know!

Date: 2007-07-30 05:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] woolymonkey.livejournal.com
This is just perfect!

Jack's hanging - at least as much as the Kraken - shows his ability to face the worst with style, but Christ, it must have taken a toll!
Actually, he’s thankful he hadn’t pissed himself. Very true, and very Jack.

I love the way you bring out the emotion just under the surface of those final scenes.

Date: 2007-07-30 05:35 pm (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack - DotM by Doobicon)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
He's quite an expert at hiding emotion, but the stuff he's been through can't have been easy. I'm glad you liked this. It's one of my favorite pieces, still makes me smile. Again, thank you for reading and commenting!

Date: 2008-04-30 08:28 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] meowbooks.livejournal.com
I liked how you capitalized The Legend. I've thought of it in that way for a while without even realizing it. It is important to him and this was pleasure to read.

Date: 2008-05-01 02:51 am (UTC)
ext_15536: Fuschias by Geek Mama (Jack - WTF?)
From: [identity profile] geekmama.livejournal.com
Thank you so much! I definitely think Jack would capitalize The Legend. *G*

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